Correction/graffitis

Correction/graffitis
Message de juju356 posté le 19-03-2013 à 22:25:47 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,

Pouvez-vous m'aider s'il vous plaît?
Pourriez-vous corriger le texte suivant:

I write this text for speak about graffiti. We can see that the University buildings are covered with graffiti. On the major walls of the University there are lots of graffiti. We have different forms of graffiti. For example in the same wall we have a message, a scribble and drawings. The message is sexual, racism or about a politic statement with this type of graffiti some people may be shocked by the tags. We can consider these actions as a form of vandalism. But some drawings are very nice. They give a life at our white walls. The person that realized this graffiti wants shows their opinion or vandalizes the building but for some graffiti writers the graffiti has become a pastime. For stopped graffiti on the university buildings we have two solutions. The first consist in clean up the walls. The cost of this operation is high. For example in London to clear up graffiti the city spent £100m. Then we must catch the graffiti writers because it is a criminal damage in the law. The security should be more important with surveillance camera and guards. The other solution: donate a wall program. This program is already used in Vancouver. It is a program to give graffiti writers a legal way of expression. You donate a part of the wall and the graffiti writer can “draw” legally. But they can’t write or draw something that is religious, sexual or politics. I think that this second solutions is the best. In Vancouver the tagging is reduced by 90%.

Merci d'avance pour vos réponses.

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Modifié par lucile83 le 20-03-2013 06:46

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Réponse: Correction/graffitis de notrepere, postée le 20-03-2013 à 00:11:23 (S | E)
Hello

I write(forme progressive) this text to speak about graffiti. We can see that the University buildings are covered with graffiti. On the major walls of the University there is lots of graffiti. We have different forms of graffiti. For example in(1) the same wall we have a message, a scribble and drawings. The message is sexual, racism (il faut un adjectif) or about a political statement. With this type of graffiti, some people may be shocked by the tags. We can consider these actions as a form of vandalism. But some drawings are very nice. They give a life at(1) our white walls. The person that realized this graffiti wants shows (3) their opinion or vandalizes(2) the building but for some graffiti writers the graffiti has become a pastime. For stopped graffiti on the university buildings we have two solutions. The first consist(accorde) in clean up of the walls. The cost of this operation is high. For example in London to clear up graffiti the city spent £100m. Then we must catch the graffiti writers because it is a criminal damage in the law. The security should be more important with surveillance cameras and guards. The other solution: 'donate a wall' program. This program is already used in Vancouver. It is a program to give graffiti writers a legal way of expression. You donate a part of the wall and the graffiti writer can “draw” legally. But they can’t write or draw something that is religious, sexual or politics. I think that this second solutions is the best. In Vancouver the tagging is(temps) reduced by 90%.

(1) mauvaise préposition
(2) infinitif
(3) infinitif + il faut un autre verbe

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Modifié par notrepere le 20-03-2013 04:59

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