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Message de happyboy3311 posté le 02-11-2013 à 20:33:43 (S | E | F)
Bonsoir à tous !
Notre professeur nous a demandé d'écrire la biographie de l'auteur de Great Gatsby en essayant de placer des tournures grammaticales complexes. Je pense avoir fait quelques erreurs; pourriez-vous m'aider à les trouver s'il vous plait ?
Merci d'avance pour vos réponses !

First of all Francis Scott Key Fitzgerald was born in 1896, the 24th of September. Besides his name was after Francis Scott Key, a distant parent and the lyricist of the USA national anthem.
His family wasn’t rich but thanks to the inheritance of his mother, Francis entered in the private school Saint Paul Academy then in the junior high school Newman. He was keen on the literature and he used to write a lot of poems.
In addition he was looking forward to enter in Princeton University.
Unfortunately, when he entered in Princeton, he was rejected by others; he had a few of friends.
Then, he left Princeton and in 1917, he entered in the US army for the First World War. It was worth going in the army because he met Zelda Sayre. Thus he fell in love and he married Zelda.
He wrote for her This Side of Paradise which had a huge success. Then he went to live in France and wrote Great Gatsby which has been published in 1925. He wished a real success for Great Gatsby but it wasn’t immediate. Finally F. Scott Fitzgerald wrote a lot of others books and died in 1940 in Hollywood.
Zelda died in the madness in 1948.

To put it in a nutshell Francis Scott Key Fitzgerald was a leader of the Lost Generation, an American literary movement and is still today a very famous writer…

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Modifié par happyboy3311 le 02-11-2013 20:34

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Modifié par lucile83 le 02-11-2013 20:39

Réponse: F. Scott Fitzgerald/ Correction de violet91, postée le 02-11-2013 à 21:58:06 (S | E)
Hello happyboy ,

Quel programme intéressant à ton âge ! Il te faudra écouter la chanson ' Zelda' d'Yves Simon .
- la date à remettre dans l'ordre : born on September 24th
- génitif : USA 's national anthem ( son nom ?...et là Jimmy Hendricks at Woodstock )
- forme pleine toujours plus élégante à l'écrit : was not ( 2 fois).
- Francis could enter ( v.transitif + cod : le 'en' est déjà contenu par le verbe )
- St. Paul's Academy public ( = private school .
- Newman's junior high school ( = lycée )
- looked forward to + gerund - joining the US army .
- worth going to ...
- Zelda Sayre ( précise où)
- pl. They fell in love with each other at first sight and got married.
- des guillemets pour citer le moindre ouvrage .
- prétérit passif : which was published .
- The writer expected ( or hoped to get ) much success with it .
- oh ! Oh ! Adjectifs invariables en anglais : other novels such as ( cherche deux autres titres , au moins )
- Il faut parler de leurs goûts respectifs ( luxueux) de la mode dans années 20 ( the twenties ) du jazz New Orleans et des soirées 'folles ' dancing charleston, des belles voitures and so on ..
- Zelda montrait depuis toujours( excentricité débordante) et de plus en plus ( more and more ) des signes de mental disorder what really affected him and influenced his writing.
- she was going mad ; mentally ill .
- she died completely insane , actually.

La conclusion est bonne ; ajoute peut-être que certains de ses livres ont été adaptés au cinéma ce qui l'a rendu connu d'un encore plus vaste public .
Good luck et comme d'habitude , bonne adaptation !

Réponse: F. Scott Fitzgerald/ Correction de happyboy3311, postée le 03-11-2013 à 22:07:19 (S | E)
Ahah ^^ merci beaucoup !

J'ai oublié d'ajouter que je ne devais pas dépasser 15 lignes... ça va être un peu juste :D
Donc, voici le résultat =)

First of all Francis Scott Key Fitzgerald was born on September 24th in 1896.
Besides his name was after Francis Scott Key, a distant parent and the lyricist of the USA‘s national anthem, The Star Spangled Banner. His family was not rich but thanks to the inheritance of his mother, Francis could enter Saint Paul Academy then in the Newman high school.
He was keen on the literature and he used to write a lot of poems. In addition he was looking forward to entering in Princeton University.
Unfortunately, when he entered in Princeton, he was rejected by others; he had a few of friends. Then, he left Princeton and in 1917, he joined the US army for the First World War. It was worth going to the army because he met Zelda Sayre near Montgomery, in Camp Sheridan.
Thus they fell in love with each other at first sight and got married. He wrote for her "This Side of Paradise" which had a huge success.
Then he went to live in France and wrote "Great Gatsby" which was published in 1925. He expected much success with "Great Gatsby" but it was not immediate. Finally F. Scott Fitzgerald wrote a lot of other novels such as "Three Hours Between Planes" and other books like "The Last Tycoon" which was not finished. He died in 1940 in Hollywood. Zelda was going mad and she died completely insane in 1948.

To put it in a nutshell Francis Scott Key Fitzgerald was a leader of the Lost Generation, an American literary movement and is still today a very famous writer thanks to the many movies adaptations of his books…

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Modifié par happyboy3311 le 03-11-2013 22:07

Réponse: F. Scott Fitzgerald/ Correction de violet91, postée le 04-11-2013 à 01:50:56 (S | E)
before going to sleep !
Les génitifs St. Paul's / Newman's / 0 article devant literature / to enter a place ( no in)he entered Princeton Uncversity / many novels ( a lot of ..bof !) / very few friends : vraiment peu d.amis / he came( notre point de vue = rapprochement ) over to live in France (fais sauter which was ) published / évite le répétition de 'Great Gatsby : much success with it / also very famous ...adaptations from ...
Have a good night .

Réponse: F. Scott Fitzgerald/ Correction de happyboy3311, postée le 04-11-2013 à 18:27:12 (S | E)
Merci encore ^^
Alors, voilà le résultat (j'ai rajouté que sa nouvelle a été publiée après sa mort !)

First of all Francis Scott Key Fitzgerald was born on September 24th in 1896. Besides his name was after Francis Scott Key, a distant parent and the lyricist of the USA‘s national anthem, The Star Spangled Banner. His family was not rich but thanks to the inheritance of his mother, Francis could enter Saint Paul’s Academy then Newman’s high school. He was keen on literature and he used to write many poems. In addition he was looking forward to entering Princeton University. Unfortunately, when he entered Princeton, he was rejected by others; he had very few of friends. Then, he left Princeton and in 1917, he joined the US army for the First World War. It was worth going to the army because he met Zelda Sayre near Montgomery, in Camp Sheridan. Thus they fell in love with each other at first sight and got married. He wrote for her "This Side of Paradis"e which had a huge success. Then he came over to live in France and wrote "Great Gatsby", published in 1925. He expected much success with it but it was not immediate. Finally F. Scott Fitzgerald wrote many of other novels such as “Three Hours Between Planes” published in 1941, after his dead, and other books like "The Last Tycoon" which was not finished. He died in 1940 in Hollywood. Zelda was going mad and she died completely insane in 1948.
To put it in a nutshell Francis Scott Key Fitzgerald was a leader of the Lost Generation, an American literary movement and is still today a very famous writer thanks to the many movies adaptations from his books…

Réponse: F. Scott Fitzgerald/ Correction de happyboy3311, postée le 04-11-2013 à 22:25:28 (S | E)
Merci pour vos réponses, je vous tiendrai bien entendu au courant de ma note

Bonne soirée à vous !

Réponse: F. Scott Fitzgerald/ Correction de violet91, postée le 05-11-2013 à 01:12:00 (S | E)
Hello happyboy,

Very sorry for being so late ...but in case you have another look tomorrow morning ...
- a distant relative ( parents ne concernent que père et mère )- Zelda and he were fans of jazz and dancing .
- many novels ( not many poems ) / many ( pas de of , tu penses en français ) novels , after his death ( nom !) , very few ( pas de of , tu penses en français ) friends , not finished = unfinished, unachieved .
He is still very famous and read a lot , and also many films have been successfully adapted from two best-sellers .
Voilà pour ma participation tardive ...have a good night !

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