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Message de mar4gaux posté le 16-11-2013 à 20:11:49 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
pour mardi j'ai un DM sur les héros, pouvez-vous le corriger s'il vous plaît? Merci d'avance
Il n'y a que l'intro et la conclusion ^^
For children, be a hero is a dream. They all want to become like Batman, Spiderman and even Superman and save the world. But, what they do not know is that, all around us, there are heroes. Maybe, with out magic powers but even tought heroes. But what is a hero? A hero is a person of superhuman qualities who is admired for his/her courage or outstanding achievements.
Can anyone be a hero?
Firstly, we will speak about famous heroes then we will explain what is a hero by job.
To my mind, everyone can be a hero with his actions and his toughts. Indeed, after the definition, a hero is admired for his courage and his actions so everyone can be a hero like firemen who save the lifes of others or famous people who do move the belongings. Everybody can do what he wants with his life so, if he wants to help others with his qualities he can be a hero, of course.
Merci encore, bon weekend
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Modifié par lucile83 le 16-11-2013 20:36
Message de mar4gaux posté le 16-11-2013 à 20:11:49 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
pour mardi j'ai un DM sur les héros, pouvez-vous le corriger s'il vous plaît? Merci d'avance
Il n'y a que l'intro et la conclusion ^^
For children, be a hero is a dream. They all want to become like Batman, Spiderman and even Superman and save the world. But, what they do not know is that, all around us, there are heroes. Maybe, with out magic powers but even tought heroes. But what is a hero? A hero is a person of superhuman qualities who is admired for his/her courage or outstanding achievements.
Can anyone be a hero?
Firstly, we will speak about famous heroes then we will explain what is a hero by job.
To my mind, everyone can be a hero with his actions and his toughts. Indeed, after the definition, a hero is admired for his courage and his actions so everyone can be a hero like firemen who save the lifes of others or famous people who do move the belongings. Everybody can do what he wants with his life so, if he wants to help others with his qualities he can be a hero, of course.
Merci encore, bon weekend
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Modifié par lucile83 le 16-11-2013 20:36
Réponse: DM heroe/correction de bluduck2, postée le 17-11-2013 à 09:40:23 (S | E)
Hello mar4gaux !
Voici quelques suggestions :En grammaire ,revoyez le gérondif ("le fait d'être" un héros ),et le pluriel du mot "life" .
En vocabulaire, vérifiez le sens et la prononciation de: "though/eventhough " ,"a thought" ( cf: to think) ,l'adjectif "tough" ,et aussi la
préposition "through" .
A la ligne 5 ,essayez de remplacer "by job "par une autre tournure . Hope this helps ! Bluduck2
Réponse: DM heroe/correction de bluduck2, postée le 17-11-2013 à 09:44:47 (S | E)
Hello again mar4gaux !
J'ai oublié de vous dire que "move the belongings " évoque pour moi le travail d'un déménageur ,ce qui n'est sans doute pas ce que vous voulez dire !! Hope this helps ! Bluduck2
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