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Message de kbyle76dz posté le 29-04-2014 à 14:08:01 (S | E | F)
Bonjour
je passe dans peu de temps mon oral d'anglais et j'aimerais que vous corrigiez les fautessvp s'il vous plaît.
Merci d'avance pour vos réponses..
Mythes/Heros
I'm going to speak about the notion Mythes and heros. At first I would like to give definitions of the hero, a hero is a person who can be admired ou rejected by people or a society, they could from to hitory like cowboy, knights, president...They could be bad or good, of course you have bad people who can be considered like hereos for exemple Mafia Boss, gangster who are usually created by movie like Scarface, The gold Father... And the good people like wars Hereos, a person who have save a life...
And the Myths are traditionnally so odl you cannot track them back, they could represent a pilar of society like pioneer in USA.
We can wonder how That is whoever made a person or a movement become heroes or myths?
So we gone to see this into different social mouvement, the manifest destiny and the push west with the pioneer, cowboys and indians who have forged the american socity, the swinging the social brtish revolution ans a exemple of person who have fled the technologies.
I think a persone could be considred like hereos for this action and his temper who are diffrent from others, like we can see in the document BROKEN DREAMS with the pioneers because they were courageous men who went in hostiles areas to find a better life. In this situation we can said they are a hereos because they do something that another can't do, or the exemple of the PONY EXPRESS who a young men go with horse to give letter, we can considered them like heroes because it was very hard work, because the could be attaked by indians, snakes...
After a hereos is a person who have tooked forward the company, like in england were a lot of people have contribute to changing society like we can see in the document THE TIME ARE CHANGING we talk about « hero boom » with the beatles, the english football, the Stones...They particped to changes the strict british society they have they brought a loosening social, sexual...And have reported this strict society. And we have people who in future could be donsidered like heroes for exemple in the document A MAN IN FRONT OF HIS YURT because we have a man who dicided to not live whith technologie, and the modern life and maybe this man could be a hero for the next generation.
And for a myth, I think the myth are based on Stereotypes like in the document OUR WESTERN ROOTS with the Cowboys who(which) leaves to the sunrise of the sun.
The myths are for me a pillar for society, america is a good exemple because their temper and culture are based on the myth of push west and pioneers.
The myths are like a model and motivated people like the americans dreams who have push a lot of people in USA ans have participed to make the power of USA or the Manifest destiny who hace motivated a lot of people to go to west like we see in MANIFEST DESTINY.
To conclude as we see Hero and Myths are pillar for society, and have to influence people, socity.
A Person could be considered like heroe because he is different from other people, he is a model for all. And myth influenced socity.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 29-04-2014 14:13
Message de kbyle76dz posté le 29-04-2014 à 14:08:01 (S | E | F)
Bonjour
je passe dans peu de temps mon oral d'anglais et j'aimerais que vous corrigiez les fautes
Merci d'avance pour vos réponses..
Mythes/Heros
I'm going to speak about the notion Mythes and heros. At first I would like to give definitions of the hero, a hero is a person who can be admired ou rejected by people or a society, they could from to hitory like cowboy, knights, president...They could be bad or good, of course you have bad people who can be considered like hereos for exemple Mafia Boss, gangster who are usually created by movie like Scarface, The gold Father... And the good people like wars Hereos, a person who have save a life...
And the Myths are traditionnally so odl you cannot track them back, they could represent a pilar of society like pioneer in USA.
We can wonder how That is whoever made a person or a movement become heroes or myths?
So we gone to see this into different social mouvement, the manifest destiny and the push west with the pioneer, cowboys and indians who have forged the american socity, the swinging the social brtish revolution ans a exemple of person who have fled the technologies.
I think a persone could be considred like hereos for this action and his temper who are diffrent from others, like we can see in the document BROKEN DREAMS with the pioneers because they were courageous men who went in hostiles areas to find a better life. In this situation we can said they are a hereos because they do something that another can't do, or the exemple of the PONY EXPRESS who a young men go with horse to give letter, we can considered them like heroes because it was very hard work, because the could be attaked by indians, snakes...
After a hereos is a person who have tooked forward the company, like in england were a lot of people have contribute to changing society like we can see in the document THE TIME ARE CHANGING we talk about « hero boom » with the beatles, the english football, the Stones...They particped to changes the strict british society they have they brought a loosening social, sexual...And have reported this strict society. And we have people who in future could be donsidered like heroes for exemple in the document A MAN IN FRONT OF HIS YURT because we have a man who dicided to not live whith technologie, and the modern life and maybe this man could be a hero for the next generation.
And for a myth, I think the myth are based on Stereotypes like in the document OUR WESTERN ROOTS with the Cowboys who(which) leaves to the sunrise of the sun.
The myths are for me a pillar for society, america is a good exemple because their temper and culture are based on the myth of push west and pioneers.
The myths are like a model and motivated people like the americans dreams who have push a lot of people in USA ans have participed to make the power of USA or the Manifest destiny who hace motivated a lot of people to go to west like we see in MANIFEST DESTINY.
To conclude as we see Hero and Myths are pillar for society, and have to influence people, socity.
A Person could be considered like heroe because he is different from other people, he is a model for all. And myth influenced socity.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 29-04-2014 14:13
Réponse: Bac/Mythes et héros de pseudoinventif, postée le 01-05-2014 à 11:56:15 (S | E)
Bonjour
je te propose cette correction. j'ai passé mon bac l'an dernier sur ce sujet. Une chose, Hero au pluriel s'écrit "Heroes" . autre chose, notre "nous" de majesté en anglais est hors sujet. L'anglais parle seul, il utilise "I". je t"ai corrigé cela. autre chose, essaie de faire des phrases plus courtes. Attention à l'emploi des temps. tu mets parfois du passé à la place de présent be+ing, et j'en passe.
on dit "to be considered as" et pas "to be considered like". même si c'est vrai like veut dire comme.
attention à l'emploi du past perfect.
Mythes/Heros
I'm going to talk about - Mythes and heros. To begin with would like to define what is a hero, . A hero is a person - admired or rejected by people or a society. (la phrase qu'il y avait ici était un peu bizarre et pas forcément utile) A hero can be bad or good. For example you can have bad people considered as heroes, like Mafia Boss or gangster - usually created by movie like Scarface, The gold Father... And the good people like war Heroes, a person who have save a life...
And _ Myths are traditionnally so old you cannot track them back, they could represent a pilar of society like pioneer in USA.
I want to wonder how can a person or a movement become hero or myth?
So we are going to see this into different social mouvement, the manifest destiny and the conquest of the west with the pioneer, cowboys and indians who have forged the american society, the swinging the social brtish revolution as a exemple of person who have fled the technologies.
I think a person could be considred as a hero for this action and his temper who are diffrent from others, like we can see in the document BROKEN DREAMS with the pioneers because they were courageous men who went in hostiles areas to find a better life. (phrase trop longue. ) In this situation we can say (pourquoi avais tu mis "said"? l'action n'est pas passée..) they are a hereos because they do something that another can't do, or the exemple of the PONY EXPRESS where (ou se dit where. who c'est "qui") a young men go with a horse to give a letter, we can consider them as heroes because it was very hard work, because they could be attaked by indians, snakes...
then a hero is a person having taken forward the company, like in england were a lot of people have contributed to changing society like we can see in the document THE TIME ARE CHANGING we talk about « hero boom » with the beatles, the english football, the Stones...They participated (le verbe c'est participate et pas participe) to changes the strict british society they have brought a loosening social, sexual...And have reported this strict society. And we have people who can be donsidered as heroes in the future for exemple in the document A MAN IN FRONT OF HIS YURT because we have a man who dicided to not live whith technologie, and the modern life and maybe this man could be a hero for the next generation.
And for a myth, I think the myth are based on Stereotypes like in the document OUR WESTERN ROOTS with the Cowboys who(which) leaves to the sunrise of the sun.
The myths are for me a pillar for society, america is a good exemple because their temper and culture are based on the myth of push west and pioneers.
The myths are like models and motivated people like the americans dreams who have push a lot of people in USA ans have participated to make the power of USA or the Manifest destiny who hace motivated a lot of people to go to west like we see in MANIFEST DESTINY.
To conclude ("as we see" est incorrect et inutile) Hero and Myths are pillar for society, and have to influence people, socity
A Person can be considered as a hero because he is different from other people, he is a model for all. And myth influences society.
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