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Message de antoniavecuns posté le 03-05-2014 à 16:12:41 (S | E | F)
Bonjour ;)
Je viens de terminer un exposé qui a pour sujet: Why I would or wouldn't like to visit South Africa?
J'aimerais que vous me donniez votre avis ainsi que m'indiquer d'éventuelles erreurs que vous pourriez trouver.
Merci pour votre aide.
Why I would like to visit South Africa?
South Africa is a big country which has an area of 1.219.912 km² that is to say twice and half France. South Africa is situated in the southmost of African continent. It's limited to the North by Namibia desert, Bostwana, Zmbabwe and Swaziland. It's boarded on 2500 km by ocean.
The population of South Africa is 47 390 900 inhabitants. Since 1961 it became “The Republic of South Africa”.
Its population is constituted by a majority of black, a minority of white, half-blood and Asian. This cultural mixture is really interesting and it is one of the reasons why I would like visiting this country often called the "Rainbow Nation" with a flag of six colors.
So there is 11 official languages in The Republic of South Africa! The three main clauses is Zulus, Xhosa and English.
Another reason why I would love visiting South Africa is its multiple magnificent landscape! My favorite landscape is the mountains of Drakensberg!
The African baptized it Drakensberg that means the Dragon’s mountain. The Zulus called it Quathlamba that means «wall of spears»
Drakensberg is a mountain range of South Africa and Lesotho which goes on, in the North, in Swaziland.
A park classified on the list of the world heritage protects the fauna, the flora and the local archaeological remains.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 03-05-2014 17:14
Message de antoniavecuns posté le 03-05-2014 à 16:12:41 (S | E | F)
Bonjour ;)
Je viens de terminer un exposé qui a pour sujet: Why I would or wouldn't like to visit South Africa?
J'aimerais que vous me donniez votre avis ainsi que m'indiquer d'éventuelles erreurs que vous pourriez trouver.
Merci pour votre aide.
Why I would like to visit South Africa?
South Africa is a big country which has an area of 1.219.912 km² that is to say twice and half France. South Africa is situated in the southmost of African continent. It's limited to the North by Namibia desert, Bostwana, Zmbabwe and Swaziland. It's boarded on 2500 km by ocean.
The population of South Africa is 47 390 900 inhabitants. Since 1961 it became “The Republic of South Africa”.
Its population is constituted by a majority of black, a minority of white, half-blood and Asian. This cultural mixture is really interesting and it is one of the reasons why I would like visiting this country often called the "Rainbow Nation" with a flag of six colors.
So there is 11 official languages in The Republic of South Africa! The three main clauses is Zulus, Xhosa and English.
Another reason why I would love visiting South Africa is its multiple magnificent landscape! My favorite landscape is the mountains of Drakensberg!
The African baptized it Drakensberg that means the Dragon’s mountain. The Zulus called it Quathlamba that means «wall of spears»
Drakensberg is a mountain range of South Africa and Lesotho which goes on, in the North, in Swaziland.
A park classified on the list of the world heritage protects the fauna, the flora and the local archaeological remains.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 03-05-2014 17:14
Réponse: Travail /Afrique du Sud de bluduck2, postée le 07-05-2014 à 09:38:19 (S | E)
Hello antoniavecuns !
Quelques remarques de syntaxe
ligne 1: Vous posez une question, l'ordre des mots est:mot interrogatif+auxiliaire+pronom personnel
ligne 1:oubli de l'article "a" devant "half"
ligne 2:"southmost"a la valeur d'un adjectif, vous devez mettre un nom après "southmost"
ligne 3:revoyez le passif ou employez une tournure active "L'océan borde..;"
ligne 4:corrigez la préposition "en" devant la date ;si vous employez "since",il faut conjuguer au present perfect .
ligne 6 et ligne 8 :après le conditionnel "I would like /love ", il faut utiliser l'infinitif complet.
ligne 7 "there is" est suivi du singulier .Conjuguez au pluriel.
Pour le lexique ,cherchez un autre mot pour "métis" , et pour groupes ethniques ("clauses" ne convient pas!)
Quant au contenu,je vous suggère de parler de l'immense transformation qu'a connue l'Afrique du Sud ,de ses richesses,du contexte actuel .
I hope this helps ! Bluduck2
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