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Message de mar4gaux posté le 30-12-2014 à 11:22:28 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
pour la rentrée nous avons un DM dans lequel il faut raconter le prochain film de James Bond. Pouvez-vous le corriger s'il vous plait?
Merci d'avance pour votre aide précieuse !

While he gets ready to go to Italy, country of his new secret task, James Bond feels himself followed in the airport. His plane is convoluted because of a phone call but he only just succeeds to land. After this violent landing, he wonders himself who wants to kill him; yet he must focus on his task. Therefore, he continues his travel to Italy.
Arrived in his Hotel room of Roma and in lovely company, he gives them, as usual, 2 exceptional Vodka-Martini. When he goes to drink his glass, the lovely Italian faints with the glass in her hand. He hears a noise behind the door. Someone tries to enter; but James Bond goes out by the window.
Wanting to discover the truth, he comes back to his Hotel Room which has been carefully cleaned. Only a calling card has been forgotten. It contains a number phone and the letter "S". James Bond calls the number and succeeds to trace it.
He goes to the address which he found and discovers Blodfewd, alone, on an hospital bed in a very-secured room. Then he returns to Roma, to get hold of equipment to enter in Blodfeld's room. But on the road, he is taking by a high-speed pursuit. After some minutes of spectacular pursuit, the persecutor's car falls in a ravine. James Bond stops and goes to see it; but in the car, he sees a young lady. He extracts her of the car before it explodes and leaves.
Some times later, he comes back to Blodfeld's room, but when he tries to enter, the young lady who he has saved, pricks up a gum on him. She says that she is Ernst Blodfeld's daughter and that her father wants to avenge himself before dying. But that one does no arrive to kill his savior and she leaves him get away.
Shortly afterwards, James Bond comes back to England. He receives a message saying that Blodfeld in truly died and if he does not search to find her, he will no be affected. This message is signed : "A peaceful cohabitation can born...".
The end.

Merci encore pour votre attention, votre temps et votre aide.

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Modifié par lucile83 le 30-12-2014 12:33

Réponse: James Bond/ correction de bluestar, postée le 30-12-2014 à 16:47:33 (S | E)
Bonjour..

While he gets ready to go to Italy, country of his new secret task, James Bond feels himself followed in at the airport. His plane is convoluted because of a phone call but he only just succeeds to land. After this violent landing, he wonders himself who wants to kill him; yet he must focus on his task. Therefore, he continues his travel to Italy.
Arrived in his Hotel room of Roma and in lovely company with a lovely companion, he gives them (utiliser 'commander'), as usual, 2 exceptional Vodka-Martini (pluriel). When he goes to drink his glass(pas 'drink his glass', on ne bois pas un verre), the lovely Italian faints with the glass in her hand. He hears a noise behind the door. Someone tries to enter; but James Bond goes out by the window.
Wanting to discover the truth, he comes back to his Hotel Room which has been carefully cleaned. Only a calling card has been forgotten. It contains a number phone (ordre des mots)and the letter "S". James Bond calls the number and succeeds to trace (in + verbe-ing) it.
He goes to the address which he found and discovers Blodfewd, alone, on an hospital bed in a very-secured high-security room. Then he returns to Roma, to get hold of equipment to enter in Blodfeld's room. But on the road, he is taking by a high-speed pursuit (a reformuler) , After some minutes of spectacular pursuit, the persecutor's pursuer's car falls into a ravine. James Bond stops and goes to see it; but in the car, he sees a young lady. He extracts her of the car before it explodes and leaves.
Some times later, he comes back to Blodfeld's room, but when he tries to enter, the young lady who he has saved, pricks up a gum (non, "pulls a ..")on him. She says that she is Ernst Blodfeld's daughter and that her father wants to avenge himself before dying. But that one does no arrive to kill his savior (sens?)and she leaves him get away.
Shortly afterwards, James Bond comes back to England. He receives a message saying that Blodfeld in truly died and if he does not search to find her, he will not be affected. This message is signed : "A peaceful cohabitation can born...".
The end.
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Dans de nombreux endroits que je ne comprends pas ce que vous voulez dire
("his plane is convoluted"?)..
Rome, pas Roma.
"Hotel room" est un nom commun et n'a pas besoin lettres majuscules au début, soumis à la règle en anglais que la première lettre d'une phrase doit être une lettre majuscule

'Rome' pas 'Roma'

Réponse: James Bond/ correction de here4u, postée le 30-12-2014 à 19:37:09 (S | E)
Hello !
A few more ...

- ,XXX country of his new secret task, James Bond feels himselffollowed
- Roma (OK!)
- when he goes to drink
- an hospital bed
- minutes of XX spectacular pursuit,
- before it explodes and leaves. (not clear ... different subjects!)
- who he has saved
- she leaves him get away.
- and if he does not search to find her, he will not be affected. This message is signed : "A peaceful cohabitation can born...". (doesn't make sense !)

Allez ! Courage !

Réponse: James Bond/ correction de mar4gaux, postée le 02-01-2015 à 14:36:04 (S | E)
Bonjour, tout d'abord merci beaucoup pour votre aide, il y a tout de même quelques corrections que je n'arrive pas à faire seule, les voici:
- son avion est détourné : his plane is hijacked ?
- il réussi à le faire atterrir : Bond just succeeds to land it ?
- c'est who ]wants to kill him ou who want to kill him ?
- Vodka-Martinis ?
- he is taking by a high-speed pursuit (a reformuler), je ne sais pas quoi mettre ...
- he extracts her from the car ?
- who he has saved ? Je ne sais pas quoi mettre à la place de who
- pointer un pistoler : pricks up a gun ?
- she lets him go away ?
Merci encore de votre correction

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Modifié par lucile83 le 02-01-2015 17:52
Pas de rouge sur le forum, merci.

Réponse: James Bond/ correction de bluestar, postée le 02-01-2015 à 17:23:28 (S | E)
Bonjour..

son avion est détourné : his plane is hijacked ? OK
- il réussi à le faire atterrir : Bond just succeeds to land (in + participe apres 'succeeds')it ?
- c'est who wants to kill him ou who want to kill him ? Who wants (parce que le sujet est singulier)
- Vodka-Martinis ? vodka martinis (sans trait d'union , et généralement écrit sans les lettres majuscules)
- he is taking by a high-speed pursuit (a reformuler), je ne sais pas quoi mettre ..his car is pursued at high speed.
- he extracts her from the car ? OK
- who he has saved ? Je ne sais pas quoi mettre à la place de who ...A proprement parler , vous devriez ecrire 'whom'(objectif ) pas 'who' (subjectif)..Par exemple: "the man who got the job" (who: subjectif)..."The man whom I met" (whom:objectif). La distinction entre 'who' et 'whom' est souvent ignorée en anglais moderne, mais vous devez être conscient de cela
- pointer un pistoler : pricks up points a gun ?
- she lets him go get away ?

Bonne année!

Réponse: James Bond/ correction de mar4gaux, postée le 05-01-2015 à 19:06:40 (S | E)
Re bonsoir j'aurais aussi aimé, si vous avez le temps ce soir ou demain matin avant 10h30 de jeter un oeil à la suite du travail qui est la description de l'affiche du film, merci d'avance et bonne reprise !

The 24th poster of a James Bond movie is rather refine. The capital lettre SPECTRE, which are written in a brilliant white, are brought out thanks to the dark and simple background. In the middle of the poster, we can see the clear blue reflection of James Bond figure. Behind him, in the left middle, there is a nearly erased shadow representing Ernst Blodfeld. In the back-ground, we make out, in the right bottom, the young lady, who is Blodfewd's daughter in a beautiful dark blue evening dress. Finally at the very bottom of the poster are written, the 3 names of the principal actors who played: James Bond (Daniel Craig), Ernst Blodfeld ( Christoph Waltz) and his daughter (Lea Seydoux).

Réponse: James Bond/ correction de bluestar, postée le 05-01-2015 à 20:28:50 (S | E)
Bonsoir..

The 24th poster of a James Bond movie (ordre des mots..The poster of the 24th etc) is rather refine. The capital lettre (un mot francais et il faut le pluriel) SPECTRE, which are written in a brilliant white, are brought out ~~thanks to~~ by the dark and simple background. In the middle of the poster, we can see the clear blue reflection of the James Bond figure. Behind him, in the left middle (ordre), there is a nearly erased ('indistinct' serait mieux) shadow representing Ernst Blodfeld. In the back-ground (background, un mot), we make out, in the right bottom (ordre), the young lady, who is Blodfewd's(orth.) daughter in a beautiful dark blue evening dress. Finally at the very bottom of the poster are written the 3 names of the three principal actors ~~who played~~: Daniel Craig (Bond),Christoph Waltz(Blodfeld) and Lea Seydoux, his daughter.
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Je ne ai pas vu l'affiche donc je fais ce que nous appelons en anglais "an educated guess"

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