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Message de kolegram posté le 19-04-2015 à 15:38:22 (S | E | F)
Bonjour !
S'il vous plaît, pourriez-vous m'aider à corriger cette présentation ?

The Pont l'Abbé area
is so full of natural treasures that it’s hard to know where to start! To fully comprehend the region’s diversity, and the need to protect this precious natural heritage, numerous associations and other structures are on hand all year round, helping you discover the landscapes, flora and fauna, as well as its history, and the history of the men and women that live in this beautiful region.
A cycling holiday is a great way to see Brittany and with a choice of dedicated cycle routes around the country it’s just a question of where you want to start. Go cycling across rolling countryside, along coastal paths and through idyllic towns and villages. Similar to ski resorts, mountain-biking centres (espaces VTT) are officially approved sites offering marked trail of different levels, to suit every type of cyclist, whether you’re a beginner, experienced rider, with the family or going solo… Spread throughout the region’s four departments, they offer a variety of facilities such as bike washing areas, bike hire and repair, organised treks, qualified instructors, accommodation and catering facilities.

Je vous remercie!
cordialement
kolegram

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Modifié par lucile83 le 19-04-2015 17:58

Réponse: Bicycle touring/aide de violet91, postée le 19-04-2015 à 17:45:15 (S | E)
Bonjour ,
Votre présentation est quasi parfaite and quite attractive , by the way, you know .
Cycling in Brittany, then .
-The(inutile , le nom propre fait office de déterminant) Pont l'Abbé area ...
-’s( forme pleine s'il s'agit d'une brochure) hard
-To fully comprehend ( apprehend)the region’s diversity( un complément du nom classique pour mettre en valeur 'diversity),
-and the need to protect this precious natural heritage...(if ' culturel ', you mean)...
-history of the men and women that( who plus élégant) live .
-A cycling holiday is a great way to see ( of + gérondif) Brittany and with a choice of dedicated cycl-gérondif) routes around the country it’s just a question of where you want to start. Go cycling across rolling countryside, along coastal paths and through idyllic towns and villages ( phrase à l'impératif ?).
- Similar to ( préposition 'comme')in ski ( tolérance ; skiing resorts ) resorts, mountain-biking centres (VTT espaces ) trail pl)]of different levels, to suit every type of cyclist,( pl.) whether you’re a beginner, X (art.indéfini)experienced rider, ( part.présent à répéter)with the (possessif)family or going solo…
-Spread throughout the region’s four departments, they offer a variety of facilities such as bike washing areas, bike hire and repair (mot manquant ?)shops, places?), organized treks, qualified instructors, accommodation and catering facilities.

Bonne fin de journée.

Réponse: Bicycle touring/aide de kolegram, postée le 22-04-2015 à 10:24:16 (S | E)
Merci beaucoup pour les suggestions, voici mon texte corrigé:

Pont l'Abbé area's
is so full of natural treasures that it’s hard to know where to start! To fully apprehend the region’s diversity, and the need to protect this precious natural heritage, numerous associations and other structures are on hand all year round, helping you discover the landscapes, flora and fauna, as well as its history, and the history of the men and women who live in this beautiful region.
A cycling holiday is a great way of seeing Brittany and with a choice of dedicated cycling routes around the country it’s just a question of where you want to start. Go cycling across rolling countryside, along coastal paths and through idyllic towns and villages. Similar in skiing resorts, mountain-biking centres (VTT espaces) are officially approved sites offering marked trail of different levels, to suit every types of cyclists, whether you’re a beginner, an experienced rider, with the family or going solo… Spread throughout the region’s four departments, they offer a variety of facilities such as bike washing areas, bike hire and repair shops, organised treks, qualified instructors, accommodation and catering facilities.

Cordialement
kolegram

Réponse: Bicycle touring/aide de violet91, postée le 22-04-2015 à 12:52:09 (S | E)
Bonjour et merci d'avoir suivi certains conseils .
Partie de l'idée que vous élaboriez un feuillet publicitaire ( genre office de tourisme ou à plus grande échelle ) , je me suis ajustée au niveau de langue écrite . De petites retouches encore pour des choses mal cernées sans doute .

- Pont L'Abbé area ( bloc sujet; pas de marque de possession qui suivrait ) is .( pas de génitif saxon, donc )
- au lieu des 2 'it's ' du texte , rétablissez la forme non contractée , plus tenue .
- à la place de 'the region's diversity ' , préférez 'the diversity of ' ...vous mettez 'diversity' en valeur . ( pas de génitif saxon)
- similar in or to est incorrect : la préposition 'comme ' like in ' ou l'adverbe similarly to ( peu usité )
- VTT spaces / open smart spaces ( espaces est un mot français : j'avais notifié le 'e ' pour le supprimer )
- la piste ou les pistes : marked trails , non ?
- rolling countryside : la campagne vallonnée ?

Voilà tout , je crois ...on irait bien ! Bonne journée .

Réponse: Bicycle touring/aide de kolegram, postée le 22-04-2015 à 16:43:26 (S | E)
Bonsoir,
Merci violet91, voici mon texte corrigé:

Pont l'Abbé area
is so full of natural treasures that it is hard to know where to start! To fully apprehend the diversity of the region, and the need to protect this precious natural heritage, numerous associations and other structures are on hand all year round, helping you discover the landscapes, flora and fauna, as well as its history, and the history of the men and women who live in this beautiful region.
A cycling holiday is a great way of seeing Brittany and with a choice of dedicated cycling routes around the country it is just a question of where you want to start. Go cycling across rolling countryside, along coastal paths and through idyllic towns and villages. Like in skiing resorts, mountain-biking centres (VTT spaces) are officially approved sites offering marked trails of different levels, to suit every types of cyclists, whether you’re a beginner, an experienced rider, with the family or going solo… Spread throughout the region’s four departments, they offer a variety of facilities such as bike washing areas, bike hire and repair shops, organised treks, qualified instructors, accommodation and catering facilities.

Cordialement,
kolegram

Réponse: Bicycle touring/aide de kolegram, postée le 22-04-2015 à 19:04:13 (S | E)
Merci beaucoup pour les suggestions, voici mon texte corrigé:

Pont l'Abbé area's
is so full of natural treasures that it’s hard to know where to start! To fully apprehend the region’s diversity, and the need to protect this precious natural heritage, numerous associations and other structures are on hand all year round, helping you discover the landscapes, flora and fauna, as well as its history, and the history of the men and women who live in this beautiful region.
A cycling holiday is a great way of seeing Brittany and with a choice of dedicated cycling routes around the country it’s just a question of where you want to start. Go cycling across rolling countryside, along coastal paths and through idyllic towns and villages. Similar in skiing resorts, mountain-biking centres (VTT espaces) are officially approved sites offering marked trail of different levels, to suit every types of cyclists, whether you’re a beginner, an experienced rider, with the family or going solo… Spread throughout the region’s four departments, they offer a variety of facilities such as bike washing areas, bike hire and repair shops, organised treks, qualified instructors, accommodation and catering facilities.

Cordialement

kolegram

Réponse: Bicycle touring/aide de kolegram, postée le 22-04-2015 à 19:07:54 (S | E)
Oups le dernier texte est parti tout seul, désolé!

Réponse: Bicycle touring/aide de violet91, postée le 22-04-2015 à 22:50:47 (S | E)
Bonsoir kolegram ,
Oh dear ! J'avais omis une 'belle ' faute : parfois plus c'est énorme , moins on le voit , le nez dessus !!! Everybody, everything , every type ( kind ) - singulier !!!
Everything is interesting ! Everyvody loves somebody ! Every kind of cyclists loves nature ! ( vous pourriez aussi utiliser -all sorts of cyclists are fond of fresh air and nature : all sorts amènent le pluriel )
Tout me semble clair et au point . Je me rends compte que je vous avais directement corrigé en bleu dans ma première intervention, le mot 'organized' : avec un 'z' , c'est l'orthographe anglaise .
Voilà du très bon travail ! Bonne route par les chemins bretons ...' à bicyclette ! '

Réponse: Bicycle touring/aide de kolegram, postée le 23-04-2015 à 10:06:03 (S | E)
Merci, merci, violet91 et à bientôt!
kolegram

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