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Message de throwthecheese posté le 10-05-2015 à 16:50:10 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
mon oral se déroule demain, donc j'aimerais s'il vous plaît avoir vos avis sur mon travail, et si vous pouviez me dire s'il y a des erreurs ce serait très gentil de votre part, je vous remercie par avance en attendant une réponse le plus rapidement possible
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First, we are going to define what a heroe and a myth are. In fact since hundred years there is an ideal about the concept of a hero. The common definition of a heroe, in mythology is a DemiGod, a person who helps population, can have superpowers, strong, smart, brave, just perfect. But always the heroes are unique and not many. Now the definition of a myth, generally a myth is a traditionnal, typically ancient story which deals with supernatural things. It's a popular belief and can be a fiction story. So beyond those common definitions we are going to ask if everybody can be a heroe and became or constitute his own myth. Let's start with heroes of the past, the superheroes of Marvel, are the classic illustration of common definitions of myth and heroe, we are going to compare them with unusual heroes. The heroes of Marvel owns special caracteristics, they have extraordinary capacities, like superhuman physical strenght, uncommon speed, resistance to the pain... They have equipment to face the opponents who also has superpowers. The interesting point is that they have two identities, the normal one, without superpowers and the secret one with superpowers, to differentiate the two identities and keep the secret, they wear a costume. The two identities reveal the common belief, the normal persons without superpowers can't be superheroes. They need to be exceptional, their mission is to help the population, to save people and kill the bad persons, but they can't do it when they are normal. In relation with the concept of demi-God we can say that the superheroes need to be superior, better than simple humans. So now we are going to talk about normal persons of the past, who became superheroes, unforgettable and source of hope and inspiration. These persons are the heroes of segregation, we choose them because they were considered like subhumans but now they are considered like heroes so like superhumans. We are going to take the example of Rosa Parks specifically because she incarnates the fight for black people's rights and also women's rights. "The first lady of civil rights" worked before the "incident" as a simple dressmaker and nursing auxiliary, plus she was black so at that time there were no possibility for her to became a hero. But then she worked hard and with the encouragment of her husband she finished her high school studies in 1933, at a time when less than 7% of African Americans had a high school diploma. After she took part of the Civil Rights Movement and the day come for her, but also for her sisters and brothers, that was the starting of the revolution. The first of December she became a celebrity, a myth, a symbol, an icon. In fact she took the seat which was reserved for white people, when the bus conductor tell her to leave her place she just refused and became "the mother of the freedom movement" because after that "incident" with Martin Luther King the black people managed to make of the segregation laws unconstitutional. We have here the raise of a normal person who was considered as a subhuman. She has no superpowers, no exeptionnal physical strenght, no special equipment and no two identities. But despite that she became one of the most famous woman in the world, she inspires men and women. She has important and sacred values like courage, determination, strong mental and the will. She shows that anybody can became a hero and that there is hope for everybody.
We conclude that according to the circumstances anybody can became a hero, because of the real impact of their actions in the world, people believe them and understand, see that it's possible, everything is possible, the hope is still their...
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Modifié par lucile83 le 10-05-2015 17:57
Message de throwthecheese posté le 10-05-2015 à 16:50:10 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
mon oral se déroule demain, donc j'aimerais s'il vous plaît avoir vos avis sur mon travail, et si vous pouviez me dire s'il y a des erreurs ce serait très gentil de votre part, je vous remercie par avance en attendant une réponse le plus rapidement possible
Je précise que ça a déjà été corrigé par le correcteur automatique du site...
First, we are going to define what a heroe and a myth are. In fact since hundred years there is an ideal about the concept of a hero. The common definition of a heroe, in mythology is a DemiGod, a person who helps population, can have superpowers, strong, smart, brave, just perfect. But always the heroes are unique and not many. Now the definition of a myth, generally a myth is a traditionnal, typically ancient story which deals with supernatural things. It's a popular belief and can be a fiction story. So beyond those common definitions we are going to ask if everybody can be a heroe and became or constitute his own myth. Let's start with heroes of the past, the superheroes of Marvel, are the classic illustration of common definitions of myth and heroe, we are going to compare them with unusual heroes. The heroes of Marvel owns special caracteristics, they have extraordinary capacities, like superhuman physical strenght, uncommon speed, resistance to the pain... They have equipment to face the opponents who also has superpowers. The interesting point is that they have two identities, the normal one, without superpowers and the secret one with superpowers, to differentiate the two identities and keep the secret, they wear a costume. The two identities reveal the common belief, the normal persons without superpowers can't be superheroes. They need to be exceptional, their mission is to help the population, to save people and kill the bad persons, but they can't do it when they are normal. In relation with the concept of demi-God we can say that the superheroes need to be superior, better than simple humans. So now we are going to talk about normal persons of the past, who became superheroes, unforgettable and source of hope and inspiration. These persons are the heroes of segregation, we choose them because they were considered like subhumans but now they are considered like heroes so like superhumans. We are going to take the example of Rosa Parks specifically because she incarnates the fight for black people's rights and also women's rights. "The first lady of civil rights" worked before the "incident" as a simple dressmaker and nursing auxiliary, plus she was black so at that time there were no possibility for her to became a hero. But then she worked hard and with the encouragment of her husband she finished her high school studies in 1933, at a time when less than 7% of African Americans had a high school diploma. After she took part of the Civil Rights Movement and the day come for her, but also for her sisters and brothers, that was the starting of the revolution. The first of December she became a celebrity, a myth, a symbol, an icon. In fact she took the seat which was reserved for white people, when the bus conductor tell her to leave her place she just refused and became "the mother of the freedom movement" because after that "incident" with Martin Luther King the black people managed to make of the segregation laws unconstitutional. We have here the raise of a normal person who was considered as a subhuman. She has no superpowers, no exeptionnal physical strenght, no special equipment and no two identities. But despite that she became one of the most famous woman in the world, she inspires men and women. She has important and sacred values like courage, determination, strong mental and the will. She shows that anybody can became a hero and that there is hope for everybody.
We conclude that according to the circumstances anybody can became a hero, because of the real impact of their actions in the world, people believe them and understand, see that it's possible, everything is possible, the hope is still their...
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Modifié par lucile83 le 10-05-2015 17:57
Réponse: Bac/Myths and Heroes de throwthecheese, postée le 10-05-2015 à 18:08:03 (S | E)
Personne pour m'aider?
Réponse: Bac/Myths and Heroes de bluestar, postée le 10-05-2015 à 18:29:17 (S | E)
bonjour..
(hero - singulier: heroes - pluriel: "heroe" n'existe pas)
First, we are going to define what a heroe and a myth are. In fact sincea hundred years there is (use present perfect tense here) an ideal about the concept of a hero. The common definition of a heroe, in mythology is a DemiGod, a person who helps the population, can have superpowers, is strong, smart, brave, just perfect. But always the heroes are unique and not many. Now the definition of a myth:, generally a myth is a traditionnal, typically ancient story which deals with supernatural things. It's a popular belief and can be a fiction (utiliser l'adjectif, 'fictitious') story. So beyond those common definitions we are going to ask if everybody can be a heroe and became (temps present) or constitute his own myth. Let's start with heroes of the past, the superheroes of Marvel, are the classic illustrations of common definitions of myth and heroe, we are going to compare them with unusual heroes. The heroes of Marvel (comics?) owns (accorde du verbe) special characteristics, they have extraordinary capacities, like superhuman physical strenght, uncommon speed, resistance to
. But despite that she became one of the most famous woman(pluriel) in the world, she inspires men and women. She has important and sacred values like courage, determination, strong mental and the will. She shows that anybody can became a hero and that there is hope for everybody.(became...inspires..has..shows...melange des temps ici)We conclude that according to the circumstances anybody can became a hero, because of the real impact of their actions in the world, people believe them and understand, see that it's possible, everything is possible, the hope is still their...?
Réponse: Bac/Myths and Heroes de throwthecheese, postée le 10-05-2015 à 19:19:43 (S | E)
Merci beaucoup et encore de m'avoir répondu voici ma correction.
First, we are going to define what a heroe and a myth are. In fact for a hundred years there has been an ideal about the concept of a hero. The common definition of a heroe, in mythology is a DemiGod, a person who helps the population, can have superpowers, is strong, smart, brave, just perfect. But always the heroes are unique and not many. Now the definition of a myth: generally a myth is a traditional, typically ancient story which deals with supernatural things. It's a popular belief and can be a fictitious story. So beyond those common definitions we are going to ask if everybody can be a heroe and become or constitute his own myth. Let's start with heroes of the past, the superheroes of Marvel, are the classic illustrations of common definitions of myth and heroe, we are going to compare them with unusual heroes. The heroes of Marvel comics own special characteristics, they have extraordinary capacities, like superhuman physical strength, uncommon speed, resistance to pain... They have equipment to face opponents who also have superpowers. The interesting point is that they have two identities, the normal one, without superpowers and the secret one with superpowers. To differentiate the two identities and keep the secret, they wear a costume. The two identities reveal the common belief, the normal persons without superpowers can't be superheroes. They need to be exceptional, their mission is to help the population, to save people and kill the bad persons, but they can't do it when they are normal. In relation with the concept of demi-God we can say that the superheroes need to be superior, better than simple humans. So now we are going to talk about normal persons of the past, who became superheroes, unforgettable and a source of hope and inspiration. These persons are the heroes of segregation, we choose them because they were considered as subhumans but now they are considered as heroes and superhumans. We are going to take the example of Rosa Parks specifically because she incarnates the fight for black people's rights and also women's rights. 'The first lady of civil rights' worked before the 'incident' as a simple dressmaker and nursing auxiliary, and she was black so at that time there were no possibility for her to became a hero. But then she worked hard and with the encouragment of her husband she finished her high school studies in 1933, at a time when less than 7% of African Americans had a high school diploma. After she took part of the Civil Rights Movement, the day came for her, but also for her sisters and brothers, that was the beginning of the revolution. On December 1st 1955 she became a celebrity, a myth, a symbol, an icon. In fact she took the seat which was reserved for white people, when the bus conductor told her to leave her place she just refused and became 'the mother of the freedom movement' because after that 'incident' with Martin Luther King the black people managed to make the segregation laws unconstitutional. We have here the raise ? of a normal person who was considered as a subhuman. She has had no superpowers, no exceptional physical strength, no special equipment and no two identities like Marvel's superheroes, she only had her normal identity. But despite that she became one of the most famous women in the world, she inspired men and women. She had important and sacred values like courage, determination, strong mental and the will. She showed that anybody can became a hero and that there is hope for everybody.
We conclude that according to the circumstances anybody can became a hero, because of the real impact of their actions in the world, people believe them and understand, see that it's possible, everything is possible, the hope is still there.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 10-05-2015 21:01
Réponse: Bac/Myths and Heroes de bluestar, postée le 10-05-2015 à 19:46:17 (S | E)
bonsoir..
First, we are going to define what a heroe and a myth are. In fact for a hundred years there has been an ideal about the concept of a hero. The common definition of a heroe, in mythology is a DemiGod, a person who helps the population, can have superpowers, is strong, smart, brave, just perfect. But always the heroes are unique and not many. Now the definition of a myth: generally a myth is a traditional, typically ancient story which deals with supernatural things. It's a popular belief and can be a fictitious story. So beyond those common definitions we are going to ask if everybody can be a heroe and become or constitute his own myth. Let's start with heroes of the past, the superheroes of Marvel, are the classic illustrations of common definitions of myth and heroe, and we are going to compare them with unusual heroes. The heroes of Marvel comics
We conclude that according to the circumstances anybody can became a hero, because of the real impact of their actions in the world, people believe them and understand, see that it's possible, everything is possible, the hope is still there.
Réponse: Bac/Myths and Heroes de throwthecheese, postée le 10-05-2015 à 19:50:57 (S | E)
Je ferai les corrections nécessaires, merci beaucoup!
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