The settlers/Correction
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Message de kaleid posté le 11-09-2015 à 18:46:04 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
je souhaiterais que quelqu'un puisse m'aider à corriger mon résumé, s'il vous plaît. Je remercie d'avance ceux ou celles qui prendront le temps de m'aider!
The first settler of north America was Christopher Columbus in 1492. Moreover during the XVIIth century, the countries who have colonized north America were England, Holland, France and Spain. Afterwards between 1860 and 1885 the Irish settled in north America since they were confronted with a great famine: the Potato Blight, they were accompagnied by the Welsh, the Scots, the Scandinavians and the Germans. Finally after 1885 north America was settled by the Italians,the Chineases,the Russians, the Poles, the Ukranians, the Jews, the Greeks and by south America. Therefore that mass immigration led to the implementation of Ellis Island, it was a Island considered as the gateway to America. But also a place where were regulated the immigrants since they were too numeros, it was created in 1892 and shutted down in 1924.
Sur ce je vous souhaite à tous une bonne journée!
P.S:Correction de quelques fautes que j'avais remarquées...
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Modifié par lucile83 le 11-09-2015 18:48
Merci pour le PS car on ne peut pas toujours corriger encore et encore le même message. Votre motif est validé
Message de kaleid posté le 11-09-2015 à 18:46:04 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
je souhaiterais que quelqu'un puisse m'aider à corriger mon résumé, s'il vous plaît. Je remercie d'avance ceux ou celles qui prendront le temps de m'aider!
The first settler of north America was Christopher Columbus in 1492. Moreover during the XVIIth century, the countries who have colonized north America were England, Holland, France and Spain. Afterwards between 1860 and 1885 the Irish settled in north America since they were confronted with a great famine: the Potato Blight, they were accompagnied by the Welsh, the Scots, the Scandinavians and the Germans. Finally after 1885 north America was settled by the Italians,the Chineases,the Russians, the Poles, the Ukranians, the Jews, the Greeks and by south America. Therefore that mass immigration led to the implementation of Ellis Island, it was a Island considered as the gateway to America. But also a place where were regulated the immigrants since they were too numeros, it was created in 1892 and shutted down in 1924.
Sur ce je vous souhaite à tous une bonne journée!
P.S:Correction de quelques fautes que j'avais remarquées...
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Modifié par lucile83 le 11-09-2015 18:48
Merci pour le PS car on ne peut pas toujours corriger encore et encore le même message. Votre motif est validé
Réponse: The settlers/Correction de maria888, postée le 11-09-2015 à 22:22:26 (S | E)
Hello,
It's a good try. I would like for you to review the rules of capitalization to start with.?
Then you can correct your mistakes.
Lien internet
Réponse: The settlers/Correction de here4u, postée le 12-09-2015 à 11:24:29 (S | E)
hello !
The first settler of north America was Christopher Columbus in 1492.(clumsy...) Moreover during the XVIIth century, the countries who have colonized north America were England, Holland, France and Spain. Afterwards between 1860 and 1885 the Irish settled in north America since they were confronted with a great famine: the Potato Blight, they were accompagnied by the Welsh, the Scots, the Scandinavians and the Germans. Finally after 1885 north America was settled by the Italians,the Chineases,the Russians, the Poles, the Ukranians, the Jews, the Greeks and by south America.??? Therefore that mass immigration led to the implementation of Ellis Island, it was a Island XXXX XXXX considered as the gateway to America. But also a place where were regulated the immigrants(word order) since they were too numeros, it was created in 1892 and shuttedARGHHHHHH !!!! down in 1924.
Hope it will help !
Réponse: The settlers/Correction de kaleid, postée le 12-09-2015 à 14:57:41 (S | E)
Bonjour,
tout d'abord je tiens à vous remercier tous les deux de votre aide qui m'aura été précieuse notamment avec le lien que m'a donne maria, c'était particulièrement instructif ! Voici le texte après correction:
The first settler of North America was Christopher Columbus in 1492. Moreover during the XVIIth century, the countries who colonized North America were England, Holland, France and Spain. Afterwards between 1860 and 1885 the Irish settled in North America since they were confronted with a great famine: the Potato Blight, they were accompanied by the Welsh, the Scots, the Scandinavians and the Germans. Finally after 1885 North America was settled (je ne vois pas l'erreur sur ce coup...) by the Italians,the Chinese,the Russians, the Poles, the Ukranians, the Jews, the Greeks and by Latin Americans countries. Therefore that mass immigration led to the construction of Ellis Island (je ne vois pas l'erreur, vu que cette île est considéré comme un nom prope), this island was considered as the gateway to America. But it was also a place where the immigrants were regulated, since they were too numerous, it was created in 1892 and shut down in 1954.
P.S: Je souhaiterais savoir si ce n'est pas nécessaire de supprimer le "the" devant les immigrants des différents pays ? Puisque quand on le lit, il semblerait que ce soit l’ensemble des personnes dans le pays qui sont parties ...
P.S2: Correction de quelques fautes... (en vert)
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Modifié par lucile83 le 12-09-2015 20:51
Pas de rouge/rose sur les forums anglais; effacé.
Réponse: The settlers/Correction de here4u, postée le 12-09-2015 à 20:44:53 (S | E)
Hello !
One huge I had corrected mentally... and a few more!
The first settler (he wasn't a settler!) of North America was Christopher Columbus in 1492. Moreover during the XVIIth century, the countries whoARGH ... colonized North America were England, Holland, France and Spain. Afterwards between 1860 and 1885 the Irish settled in North America since they were confronted with a(the) great famine: the Potato Blight, they were accompanied by the Welsh, the Scots, the Scandinavians and the Germans. Finally after 1885 North America was settled (je ne vois pas l'erreur sur ce coup...) Lien internet
by the Italians,the Chinese,the Russians, the Poles, the Ukranians, the Jews, the Greeks and by Latin Americans countries. Therefore that mass immigration led to the construction of Ellis Island (je ne vois pas l'erreur, vu que cette île est considéré comme un nom prope), this island was considered as the gateway to America. But it was also a place where the immigrants were regulated(controlled? checked?), since they were too numerous, it was created in 1892 and shut down in 1954.
Réponse: The settlers/Correction de kaleid, postée le 12-09-2015 à 21:15:57 (S | E)
Bonsoir,
encore une fois je tiens à vous remercier de votre immense aide. Et non seulement pour ce topic, mais pour aussi l'autre ! Voici le texte après correction:
The first person who has discovered North America was Christopher Columbus in 1492. Moreover during the XVIIth century, the countries which colonized North America were England, Holland, France and Spain. Afterwards between 1860 and 1885 the Irish settled in North America since they were confronted with the great famine: the Potato Blight, they were accompanied by the Welsh, the Scots, the Scandinavians and the Germans. Finally after 1885 North America was colonized by the Italians,the Chinese,the Russians, the Poles, the Ukranians, the Jews, the Greeks and by South America countries. Therefore that mass immigration led to the construction of Ellis Island, this island was considered as the gateway to America. But it was also a place where the immigrants were controlled, since they were too numerous, it was created in 1892 and shut down in 1954.
Sur ce je vous souhaite une bonne soirée!
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