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Message de audrey0628 posté le 27-10-2015 à 11:15:41 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
Pourriez-vous m'aider à corriger les erreurs de mon texte, s'il vous plait?
Merci pour vos réponses
I personally don't really like Christmas. I'm always moody, I don't know why.Maybe, because a new year is coming and I always hope things will change in life, in general.I try not to be worried about the future but I'm otherthinking anyway.Now, I'm trying to let things happen (If they happen, of course). So wait and see.I don't know what kind of life I'd like to have.
But what I hope for the year 2016 is : having a good job (although I like the one I've got), making enough money, having good relationships with TRUE people, meeting new persons and living in a place where it feels good to live in. For instance, I don't want to have kids because I'm a working girl and it's definitely not my thing. I'm starting to put some money aside to be able to leave the country, one day.That's my main goal and that's what I want.
My wishes for the new year are mostly about life.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 27-10-2015 12:31
Message de audrey0628 posté le 27-10-2015 à 11:15:41 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
Pourriez-vous m'aider à corriger les erreurs de mon texte, s'il vous plait?
Merci pour vos réponses
I personally don't really like Christmas. I'm always moody, I don't know why.Maybe, because a new year is coming and I always hope things will change in life, in general.I try not to be worried about the future but I'm otherthinking anyway.Now, I'm trying to let things happen (If they happen, of course). So wait and see.I don't know what kind of life I'd like to have.
But what I hope for the year 2016 is : having a good job (although I like the one I've got), making enough money, having good relationships with TRUE people, meeting new persons and living in a place where it feels good to live in. For instance, I don't want to have kids because I'm a working girl and it's definitely not my thing. I'm starting to put some money aside to be able to leave the country, one day.That's my main goal and that's what I want.
My wishes for the new year are mostly about life.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 27-10-2015 12:31
Réponse: A new year /Correction de delf2312, postée le 30-10-2015 à 00:22:08 (S | E)
Tout ceci me semble très bien ne vous inquiétez pas.
Je remarque simplement que vous écrivez un peu comme si vous parliez (un rythme rapide, une ponctuation rapprochée, des phrases qui commencent par "so" et "but") mais cela correspond bien au style du document (un peu comme un journal n'est ce pas ?) donc je pense que c'est fait exprès.
Goodbye !
Réponse: A new year /Correction de audrey0628, postée le 30-10-2015 à 11:02:13 (S | E)
Hello,
Merci pour votre aide.
Oui, ici je voulais faire un style de narration comme si j'écrivais dans un journal.
Goodbye
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