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Leonard de Vinci/aide
Message de daybreak100 posté le 09-12-2015 à 19:27:44
Bonjour,
j'ai fait un travail sur Leonard de Vinci en anglais, et j'aimerais que quelqu'un m'aide en corrigeant mes fautes s'il vous plait.
Merci pour vos réponses.
In this foto we can see a famous artist.
Leonardo da Vinci was born in Vinci April 15, 1452 and died in Amboise May 2, 1519 , is a Florentine painter and a man of universal mind , both artist, scientist , engineer , inventor, anatomist , painter , sculptor, architect , urban planner , botanist , musician, poet, philosopher and writer.
I choose this man because for me it's a very competent person who knows everything, who are involved in daily work. In everything he does.
Today through its inventions of all kinds, scientific and artistic works, Leonardo left us a great legacy.
So , I want to display this artist particle in a chemistry room as it also contributed to the progress of science is in part thanks to him that today we can save the sick.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 09-12-2015 21:29
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Modifié par lucile83 le 14-12-2015 22:04
Récréation terminée; mettez-vous au travail.
Message de daybreak100 posté le 09-12-2015 à 19:27:44
Bonjour,
j'ai fait un travail sur Leonard de Vinci en anglais, et j'aimerais que quelqu'un m'aide en corrigeant mes fautes s'il vous plait.
Merci pour vos réponses.
In this foto we can see a famous artist.
Leonardo da Vinci was born in Vinci April 15, 1452 and died in Amboise May 2, 1519 , is a Florentine painter and a man of universal mind , both artist, scientist , engineer , inventor, anatomist , painter , sculptor, architect , urban planner , botanist , musician, poet, philosopher and writer.
I choose this man because for me it's a very competent person who knows everything, who are involved in daily work. In everything he does.
Today through its inventions of all kinds, scientific and artistic works, Leonardo left us a great legacy.
So , I want to display this artist particle in a chemistry room as it also contributed to the progress of science is in part thanks to him that today we can save the sick.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 09-12-2015 21:29
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Modifié par lucile83 le 14-12-2015 22:04
Récréation terminée; mettez-vous au travail.
Réponse: Leonard de Vinci/aide de daybreak100, postée le 09-12-2015 à 21:14:04
S'il vous plait, répondez.
Réponse: Leonard de Vinci/aide de janorton, postée le 10-12-2015 à 00:47:39
Bonjour,
Vos erreurs sont en bleu, je suis desolé si mes remarques en français sont maladroites, ce n'est pas ma langue maternelle.
In this foto(mal orthographié) we can see a famous artist.
Leonardo da Vinci was born in Vinci April 15, 1452 and died in Amboise May 2, 1519 ,
(pronom manquant) is(passé) a Florentine painter and a man of (article manquant) universal mind , both(mauvais mot, "both" signifie 2, pas de plus) artist, scientist , engineer , inventor, anatomist , painter , sculptor, architect , urban planner , botanist , musician, poet, philosopher and writer.I choose(passé) this man because for me(séparer avec des virgules) it's(en anglais, on n'utilise jamais "it" pour une personne) (Passé) a very competent person who knows(passé) everything, who are involved in daily work(???). In everything he does(passé).
Today
(virgule nécessaire) through its(utiliser un possessif ici)) inventions of all kinds, scientific and artistic So , I want to display this artist particle in a chemistry room(???) as it(he) also contributed to the progress of science
(mots manquants) is in part thanks to him(séparer avec des virgules) that today we can save the sick.Où j'ai mis des ??? cela indique que je ne comprenais pas ce que vous essayiez de dire.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 10-12-2015 05:06
Réponse: Leonard de Vinci/aide de daybreak100, postée le 10-12-2015 à 08:13:12
ok merci, j'attends d'avoir le temps et je reposte sur le site la correction.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 10-12-2015 08:45
Réponse: Leonard de Vinci/aide de here4u, postée le 10-12-2015 à 23:08:31
Hello
In this foto we can see a famous artist.
Leonardo da Vinci was born in Vinci ON April 15th, 1452 and died in Amboise XX May 2nd, 1519 . , HE is=temps! a Florentine painter and a man of universal mind , both XX artist, X scientist , XX engineer ,XX XX inventor, XX anatomist , X painter , X sculptor,XX architect , XX urban planner , X botanist , X musician,X poet,X philosopher and X writer.
I choose this man because for me it's(pronomfaux + temps!) a very competent person who knows everything, who are involved in daily work. In everything he does.(construction à revoir!)
Today through its inventions of all kinds, scientific and artistic works, Leonardo left us a great legacy.
So , I want to display this artist particle in a chemistry room as it also contributed to the progress of science is in part thanks to him that today we can save the sick.
bleu = faux; vert = mots manquants ou suggestions ...
Réponse: Leonard de Vinci/aide de daybreak100, postée le 11-12-2015 à 18:15:41
Hello,
In this photo we can see a famous artist.
Leonardo da Vinci was born in Vinci on April 15th, 1452 and died in Amboise in May 2nd, 1519 ,he is a Florentine painter, an artist,a scientist ,an engineer, an inventor, an anatomist,a painter,a sculptor,an architect ,an urban planner ,a botanist ,a musician, a poet, a philosopher and a writer.
I chose this man because for me, this is a very competent person who knews everything, who are involved in daily work. In everything he does.
Today, through his inventions of all kinds, scientific and artistic, Leonardo left us a great legacy.
So, I want to display this artist in a chemistry room as it also contributed to the progress of science and this is in part thanks to him that today we can save the sick.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 11-12-2015 19:16
Réponse: Leonard de Vinci/aide de daybreak100, postée le 11-12-2015 à 18:19:16
Merci de votre aide à tous les deux; en revanche je ne sais toujours pas par quoi remplacer it's ;je l'utilise tout le temp pour dire c'est
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Modifié par lucile83 le 11-12-2015 19:17
Réponse: Leonard de Vinci/aide de here4u, postée le 11-12-2015 à 19:18:30
Hello!
Eh bien, c'est faux ( ici, en tout cas! )
Ne pas oublier que la 3e personne du singulier a trois formes : si le sujet est masculin ( c'est un homme
) on utilise " he" ; si le sujet est féminin = femme => " she" et si le sujet est neutre ( animal, objet ) = it ! 
Contente d'avoir participé ã cette découverte.
Courage!
Réponse: Leonard de Vinci/aide de daybreak100, postée le 12-12-2015 à 10:01:00
Je
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Modifié par lucile83 le 12-12-2015 10:53
Il vaut mieux reposter (ce que vous avez fait
), plutôt que modifier ce qui a déjà écrit, sinon personne ne va plus rien comprendre à la fin.Réponse: Leonard de Vinci/aide de daybreak100, postée le 12-12-2015 à 10:04:10
voici la modification:
In this photo we can see a famous artist.
Leonardo da Vinci was born in Vinci on April 15th, 1452 and died in Amboise in May 2nd, 1519 ,he is a Florentine painter, an artist,a scientist ,an engineer, an inventor, an anatomist,a painter,a sculptor,an architect ,an urban planner ,a botanist ,a musician, a poet, a philosopher and a writer.
I chose this man because for me, this is a very competent person who knews everything, who are involved in daily work. In everything he does.
Today, through his inventions of all kinds, scientific and artistic, Leonardo left us a great legacy.
So, I want to display this artist in a chemistry room as it also contributed to the progress of science and this is in part thanks to him that today we can save the sick.
Réponse: Leonard de Vinci/aide de gerondif, postée le 12-12-2015 à 11:19:38
Bonjour,
erreurs en bleu, corrections en vert
In this photo we can see a famous artist.
Leonardo da Vinci was born in Vinci on April 15th, 1452 and died in Amboise in May 2nd, 1519 ,he is(vu qu'il est mort il y a 396 ans, je mettrais un prétérit) a Florentine painter, an artist,a scientist ,an engineer, an inventor, an anatomist,a painter,a sculptor,an architect ,an urban planner ,a botanist ,a musician, a poet, a philosopher and a writer.
I chose this man because for me, this is(il vaudrait mieux dire il est , ou il était , que voici) a very competent person who knews(pas de s au prétérit!) everything, who are(il a beaucoup de compétences mais il n'est pas pluriel) involved in daily work (ça ne veut pas dire grand chose, qu'il était impliqué dans le travail de tous les jours.(ce point n'a rien à faire là) In everything he does.
Today, through his inventions of all kinds, scientific and artistic, Leonardo left us a great legacy.
So, I want to display this artist in a chemistry room as it(quel est donc cet objet représenté par it??) also contributed to the progress of science and this is in part thanks to him that today we can save the sick.(Bien en fait on soigne les malades, on les soulage mais on ne les "sauve" pas vraiment vu que, finalement, tout le monde finit par mourir....)
Réponse: Leonard de Vinci/aide de daybreak100, postée le 12-12-2015 à 17:18:01
voici la correction:
In this photo we can see a famous artist.
Leonardo da Vinci was born in Vinci on April 15th, 1452 and died in Amboise on May 2nd, 1519 ,he was a Florentine painter, an artist,a scientist ,an engineer, an inventor, an anatomist,a painter,a sculptor,an architect ,an urban planner ,a botanist ,a musician, a poet, a philosopher and a writer.
I chose this man because for me, he is a very competent person who knew everything, who is involved in his work, in everything he does.
Today, through his inventions of all kinds, scientific and artistic, Leonardo left us a great legacy.
So, I want to display this artist in a chemistry room as he also contributed to the progress of science and this is in part thanks to him that today we can treat the sick.
Réponse: Leonard de Vinci/aide de here4u, postée le 12-12-2015 à 23:51:10
Hello !
Attention à l'association de today et d'un passé ... et à quelques maladresses (soulignées)
Leonardo da Vinci was born in Vinci on April 15th, 1452 and died in Amboise on May 2nd, 1519 ,he was a Florentine painter, an artist,a scientist ,an engineer, an inventor, an anatomist,a painter,a sculptor,an architect ,an urban planner ,a botanist ,a musician, a poet, a philosopher and a writer.
I chose this man
because for me, he is a very competent person who knew everything, who is involved in his work, in everything he does.Today, through his inventions of all kinds, scientific and artistic, Leonardo left us a great legacy.
So, I want to display this artist in a chemistry room as he also contributed to the progress of science and this is in part thanks to him that today we can treat the sick.
Réponse: Leonard de Vinci/aide de daybreak100, postée le 13-12-2015 à 13:26:47
Leonardo da Vinci was born in Vinci on April 15th, 1452 and died in Amboise on May 2nd, 1519 ,he was a Florentine painter, an artist,a scientist ,an engineer, an inventor, an anatomist,a painter,a sculptor,an architect ,an urban planner ,a botanist ,a musician, a poet, a philosopher and a writer.
I chose this man because for me, he is a very competent person who knew everything, who is involved in his work, in everything he does.
Today, through his inventions of all kinds, scientific and artistic, Leonardo left us a great legacy.
So, I want to display this artist in a chemistry room as he also contributed to the progress of science and it is in part thanks to him that today we can treat the sick.
désolé mais le reste je n'arrive pas à le corriger.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 13-12-2015 14:56
Personne ne fera le travail à votre place.
Réponse: Leonard de Vinci/aide de daybreak100, postée le 13-12-2015 à 16:24:56
oui mais on me dit que c'est faux alors que j'ai l'impression que c'est juste.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 13-12-2015 17:02
Je vous ai déjà demandé de dire 'Bonjour'
Réponse: Leonard de Vinci/aide de gerondif, postée le 13-12-2015 à 16:59:27
Hello,
(faux est le contraire de juste, faut est la troisième personne du présent du verbe falloir)
On ne peut décidément pas compter sur ces "on" qui ne vous disent pas tout!
Leonardo da Vinci was born in Vinci on April 15th, 1452 and died in Amboise on May 2nd, 1519 ,he was a Florentine painter, an artist,a scientist ,an engineer, an inventor, an anatomist,a painter,a sculptor,an architect ,an urban planner ,a botanist ,a musician, a poet, a philosopher and a writer. (ça fait un peu remplissage mais bon...)
I chose this man because for me, he is(un prétérit irait mieux) a very competent person who knew everything, who is(idem) involved in his work, in everything he does(idem).
Today, through his inventions of all kinds, scientific and artistic, Leonardo left us a great legacy.
Un prétérit cloue une action dans le passé, or ici, vous tirez des conséquences présentes de compétences de LDV passées. Il faudrait donc un present perfect. (Sinon, si je vous dis: Today, I voted at 10 o'clock, je replante cette action dans le passé de ce matin)
(Vous l'appelez Leonardo. Est-ce que, si vous faisiez un devoir sur Victor Hugo, vous l'appelleriez Victor ?)
So, I want(je voudrais, le conditionnel de like, irait mieux, ou alors "j'ai l'intention de", je planifie de", "je vais") to display this artist (vous n'allez pas exposer cet artiste comme si vous déployiez son effigie mais faire une exposition sur lui) in a chemistry room as he also contributed to the progress of science and it is in part thanks to him that today we can treat the sick.
Réponse: Leonard de Vinci/aide de daybreak100, postée le 13-12-2015 à 18:30:32
bonjour,
In this photo we can see a famous artist.
Leonardo da Vinci was born in Vinci on April 15th, 1452 and died in Amboise on May 2nd, 1519 ,he was a Florentine painter, an artist,a scientist ,an engineer, an inventor, an anatomist,a painter,a sculptor,an architect ,an urban planner ,a botanist ,a musician, a poet, a philosopher and a writer.
I chose this man because for me, he was a very competent person who knew everything, who was involved in his work, in everything he did. And, I chose these colors because they are flashy like his career.
Today, through his inventions of all kinds, scientific and artistic, Leonard left us a great legacy.
So, I would like to display this artist in a chemistry room as he also contributed to the progress of science and this is in part thanks to him that today we can treat the sick.
Réponse: Leonard de Vinci/aide de daybreak100, postée le 13-12-2015 à 21:46:52
bonsoir, c'est quoi la faute à "left us a great legacy"on dit nous a laissé pas il nous laisse non?
Réponse: Leonard de Vinci/aide de daybreak100, postée le 13-12-2015 à 22:04:17
Bonsoir gerondif, oui si je faisait un devoir sur victor hugo je l'appellerais victor car se n'est pas un devoir de francais mais d'anglais sinon en francais je remplacerais victor par le pronom "il"
Réponse: Leonard de Vinci/aide de gerondif, postée le 13-12-2015 à 23:47:25
Bonsoir,
In this photo we can see a famous artist.
Leonardo da Vinci was born in Vinci on April 15th, 1452 and died in Amboise on May 2nd, 1519 ,he was a Florentine painter, an artist,a scientist ,an engineer, an inventor, an anatomist,a painter,a sculptor,an architect ,an urban planner ,a botanist ,a musician, a poet, a philosopher and a writer.
I chose this man because for me, he was a very competent person who knew everything, who was involved in his work, in everything he did. And, I chose these colors because they are flashy,(virgule) like his career.
Today, through his inventions of all kinds, scientific and artistic, Leonard (ah, un autre prénom? Les anglais soit emploieraient le nom complet, soit diraient Da Vinci) left(il faudrait un present perfect, un auxiliaire avoir suivi du participe passé) us a great legacy.
So, I would like to display this artist in a chemistry room (one of the chemistry-rooms) as he also contributed to the progress of science and this(it va suffire) is in part thanks to him that today we can treat the sick.
Réponse: Leonard de Vinci/aide de here4u, postée le 13-12-2015 à 23:58:56
Hello !
En anglais, mais en français aussi, il convient d'éviter les familiarités avec les auteurs très célèbres ! (ou moins, d'ailleurs ...
Pourquoi pas "Totor" ?) 
"On" ...
Réponse: Leonard de Vinci/aide de lucile83, postée le 14-12-2015 à 07:19:44
Bonjour daybreak100,
Je pense que des membres du site vous donnent des conseils avisés, mais si vous ne voulez pas les suivre c'est libre à vous. Dans ce cas vos demandes d'aide ne seront plus acceptées.
A vous de voir...
Réponse: Leonard de Vinci/aide de daybreak100, postée le 14-12-2015 à 18:44:18
Bonsoir lucile,
je prends toute aide cependant je
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Modifié par lucile83 le 14-12-2015 18:53
Réponse: Leonard de Vinci/aide de lucile83, postée le 14-12-2015 à 18:52:54
Votre réponse n'est pas un argument valable; vous contestez tout ...y compris ma remarque
Réponse: Leonard de Vinci/aide de daybreak100, postée le 14-12-2015 à 18:58:36
Le présent perfect c'est "has leaved us a great legacy"
Réponse: Leonard de Vinci/aide de daybreak100, postée le 14-12-2015 à 19:02:21
Désoler lucile si je vous est "offenser" je vous aime quand même
Réponse: Leonard de Vinci/aide de gerondif, postée le 14-12-2015 à 19:29:18
Hello,
Bon, Lucile ne semble pas être un mauvais choix mais si vous pouviez un peu plus aimer l'orthographe, la grammaire et la conjugaison, ce serait bien aussi!
Désoler lucile si je vous est "offenser"
(je suis)désolée,Lucile, si je vous ai(du verbe avoir) offensée (accord au féminin)
Bon, vous n'êtes pas non plus au courant du côté irrégulier du verbe to leave, I left, left: quitter partir, laisser ...
Donc le present perfect devrait se servir de l'auxiliaire avoir + le participe passé irrégulier
Réponse: Leonard de Vinci/aide de daybreak100, postée le 14-12-2015 à 19:32:26
bonsoir c'est donc has left
Réponse: Leonard de Vinci/aide de gerondif, postée le 14-12-2015 à 19:33:19
YES!!
Réponse: Leonard de Vinci/aide de daybreak100, postée le 14-12-2015 à 19:37:33
J'ai les larmes au yeux
mais enfaite je ne réfléchipas asser car c'est des choses que je connait enplus la prochaine fois je me concentrerer plusRéponse: Leonard de Vinci/aide de gerondif, postée le 14-12-2015 à 19:50:04
Hello again,
ah, on a donc l'espoir de voir arriver un jour une phrase sans faute avec un peu plus de concentration, parce que pour l'instant, je ne sais pas pour Lucile mais moi, je frise la crise cardiaque à chaque nouveau message ! Le plus amusant, c'est que finalement, il y a moins d'erreurs dans le texte anglais que dans le texte français.
J'en ai les larmes au yeux mais en fait je ne réfléchis (on a quand même souvent un S en fin de conjugaison en première personne) pas assez car ce sont des choses que je connait(le t est plutôt en troisième personne, il connaît, pour le je un s va bien aller: des choses que je connais) en plus la prochaine fois je me concentrerer(on ne peut pas conjuguer un infinitif avec je devant: je aller, je prendre, je courir, ça ne va pas. Quant-au futur, il est en ai: je me concentrerai plus) plus
Bon, on peut se dire que, à 14 ans, Daybreak est à l'aube des connaissances grammaticales de base mais quand même
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