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Message de ay123 posté le 29-12-2015 à 23:38:09 (S | E | F)
Bonjour;
pourriez-vous m'aider à corriger mon texte s'il vous plait?
would you please help to correct this text?
in the past people used to help itch other but now they think only obout themselves they became less and less socialise in streets you see evry bodey looking in their phone they have now friend maby they have tawsand friend in facebook but no won of them is real now people chow their support with a like or a chare when they can do more.
when I think over that the only think I do is cry but i can do more so i realised that i become a part in this socity in this disias.
Merci pour vos réponses et bonne soirée.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 30-12-2015 07:12
Message de ay123 posté le 29-12-2015 à 23:38:09 (S | E | F)
Bonjour;
pourriez-vous m'aider à corriger mon texte s'il vous plait?
would you please help to correct this text?
in the past people used to help itch other but now they think only obout themselves they became less and less socialise in streets you see evry bodey looking in their phone they have now friend maby they have tawsand friend in facebook but no won of them is real now people chow their support with a like or a chare when they can do more.
when I think over that the only think I do is cry but i can do more so i realised that i become a part in this socity in this disias.
Merci pour vos réponses et bonne soirée.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 30-12-2015 07:12
Réponse: Correction/Phones de gerondif, postée le 29-12-2015 à 23:56:47 (S | E)
Hello,
you write phonetically, your spelling is seriously damaged!
mistakes in blue;
in the past people used to help itch other but now they think only obout themselves they became less and less socialise in streets you see evry bodey looking in their phone(plural) they have now friend maby they have tawsand friend in facebook but no won of them is real now people chow their support with a like or a chare when they can(conditional) do more.
when I think over that the only think I do is cry but i can do more so i realised that i become a part in this socity in this disias
Réponse: Correction/Phones de ay123, postée le 30-12-2015 à 22:55:12 (S | E)
Bonjour;
Merci gerondif pour tes remarque je vais faire attention dans la prochaine fois.
thank you very much
In the past people used to help each other but now they think only about themselves. They became less and less socialize,in steets you see everybody looking at their phones.They have now friends, maby they have thaousand friend in facebook but now one of them is real. People now show their support with a like or a share when they could do more.
When I think over that the only think i do is cry, but I can do more, so I realised that I become a part in this socity in this deseas.
bonne soirée; et
Réponse: Correction/Phones de baboune16, postée le 31-12-2015 à 10:12:23 (S | E)
Bonjour,
In the past people used to help each other but now they think only about themselves. They became(temps) less and less socialize,in steets you see everybody looking at their phones.They have now friends, maby they have thaousand friend(plural) in facebook but now one(un seul mot différent) , of them is real. People now show their support with a like or a share when they could do more.
When I think over that the only think i do is cry, but I can do more, so I realised that I become a part in this socity in
this deseas.Au minimum, quelques fautes (en bleu) de plus à corriger
Bon courage
Réponse: Correction/Phones de ay123, postée le 31-12-2015 à 20:07:28 (S | E)
bonjour;
merci baboune16 pour ta correction; tu m'as encouragé.
In the past people used to help each other but now they think only about themselves. They become less and less friendly, in streets you see everybody looking at their phones. They hove now friend maby they have thousand friends in Facebook but no one of them is real. People now show their support with a like or a share when they could do more.
when I think over that the only think I do is cry, but I con do more so I realised that I become a member in this society
bonne journée
et
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Modifié par lucile83 le 31-12-2015 21:27
Réponse: Correction/Phones de gerondif, postée le 03-01-2016 à 16:36:32 (S | E)
Bonjour, erreurs en bleu,
In the past people used to help each other but now they think only about themselves. They become less and less friendly, in streets you see everybody looking at their phones. They hove(erreur de voyelle) now friend(pluriel) maby(mal écrit et mal placé) they have thousand(c'est un nom donc au pluriel + of) friends in Facebook but no one (soit not one of the; soit none of them)of them is real. People now show their support with a like or a share when they could do more.
when I think over(une autre préposition irait mieux) that the only think( to think = penser.
a thing = une chose) I do is cry, but I con(encore une erreur de voyelle) do more so I realised that I become (il faudrait un plus que parfait, que j'atais devenu ou alors que j'étais en train de devenir, un prétérit en ing) a member in this society (quelle est le sens de cette phrase: je peux faire plus, donc je me suis rendu compte que je deviens un membre de cette société ??)
bonne journée
Réponse: Correction/Phones de ay123, postée le 10-01-2016 à 10:18:21 (S | E)
Bonjour
merci beaucoup gerondif
In the past people used to help each other but now they think only about themselves. They become less and less friendly, in streets you see everybody looking at their phones. They have now friends even if they have thousands of friends in Facebook but none of of them is real. People now show their support with a like or a share when they could do more.
when I think about that the only thing I do is cry, but I can do more. I'm waiting for them to change, but I must change myself first.
merci
Bonne journée.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 10-01-2016 10:43
Réponse: Correction/Phones de bluestar, postée le 10-01-2016 à 11:50:44 (S | E)
Bonjour...
In the past people used to help each other but now they think only about themselves. They become less and less friendly, in streets you see everybody looking at their phones. They have now friends even if they have thousands of friends in Facebook but none of
when (majuscule) I think about that the only thing I do is cry, but I can do more. I'm waiting for them to change, but I must change myself first.
Réponse: Correction/Phones de ay123, postée le 11-01-2016 à 19:56:57 (S | E)
bonjour;
merci bluestar
In the past people used to help each other but now they think only about themselves. They become less and less friendly, in streets you see everybody looking at their phones. They have no friends even if they have thousands of friends in Facebook but none of them is real. People now show their support with a like or a share when they could do more.
When I think about that the only thing I do is cry, but I can do more. I'm waiting for them to change, but I must change myself first
bonne journée
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Modifié par ay123 le 12-01-2016 12:49
Réponse: Correction/Phones de bluestar, postée le 12-01-2016 à 11:17:22 (S | E)
Bonjour...
Vous devez corriger..'..of of..'
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