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Message de donutcare posté le 14-12-2016 à 14:01:54 (S | E | F)
Bonjour !
J'ai mon oral de stage demain et je dois parler d'une journée. Voici ce que j'ai fait pour le moment :
I decided to present you the first day of my period of work experience because it was the day where I discovered for the first time the job of a lawyer/jurist/legalist (quel est le bon mot pour "juriste"?).
So firstly, at half past eight I went in a car to the C****.
In the morning, I was mainly with Mr ******, who explained to me the purpose of the society.
Then at lunchtime, I left to eat with some friends.
Afterwards, I returned at 2 p.m. I spent some time my tutor. She asked me some questions about my future project. Next to that, I attended two interviews with Mr ******.
At the end of the day, I was pretty satisfied. I learned new things.
Est-ce correct s'il vous plait ? Devrais-je parler plus de mon ressenti par rapport à la journée ? Ou d'autres choses ? Si oui, quoi ?
Merci de votre aide.
PS: Je suis en 3e.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 14-12-2016 18:29
Message de donutcare posté le 14-12-2016 à 14:01:54 (S | E | F)
Bonjour !
J'ai mon oral de stage demain et je dois parler d'une journée. Voici ce que j'ai fait pour le moment :
I decided to present you the first day of my period of work experience because it was the day where I discovered for the first time the job of a lawyer/jurist/legalist (quel est le bon mot pour "juriste"?).
So firstly, at half past eight I went in a car to the C****.
In the morning, I was mainly with Mr ******, who explained to me the purpose of the society.
Then at lunchtime, I left to eat with some friends.
Afterwards, I returned at 2 p.m. I spent some time my tutor. She asked me some questions about my future project. Next to that, I attended two interviews with Mr ******.
At the end of the day, I was pretty satisfied. I learned new things.
Est-ce correct s'il vous plait ? Devrais-je parler plus de mon ressenti par rapport à la journée ? Ou d'autres choses ? Si oui, quoi ?
Merci de votre aide.
PS: Je suis en 3e.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 14-12-2016 18:29
Réponse : Correction/oral de stage de gerondif, postée le 14-12-2016 à 17:58:48 (S | E)
Bonjour,
erreurs en bleu, corrections en vert
I decided (plutôt un présent perfect puisque la conséquence présente est que vous allez parler) to present you(construction incorrecte, utilisez plutôt to tell you about) the first day of my period of work experience (un peu long, on pourrait dire the first day of my training period) because it was the day where(compément de temps, donc, the day when) I discovered for the first time( à mettre à la fin) the job of a lawyer/jurist/legalist (quel est le bon mot pour "juriste"?).
le dictionnaire (double click sur le mot) donne:
juriste nmf (professionnel des lois) (legal)legal practitioner, legal expert n (formal)jurist n
So firstly, at half past eight I went
In the morning, I was mainly with Mr ******, who explained to me the purpose of the society.
Then at lunchtime, I left to eat(on dira plutôt I had lunch with, du coup remplacer lunchtime par une heure pour éviter la répétition de lunch) with some friends.
Afterwards, I returned (go back ou come back sont plus courants) at 2 p.m. I spent some time with my tutor. She asked me some questions about my future project.
At the end of the day, I was pretty satisfied because I had learned new things.
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