Lettre Motivation/Stage

Lettre Motivation/Stage
Message de lorr posté le 12-01-2017 à 20:53:09 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous,
Je souhaite effectuer un stage de recherche à xxx dans un laboratoire et je dois donc leur envoyer une lettre de motivation en anglais. Pourriez-vous m'aider à corriger les fautes d'orthographe possibles et la forme si certaines tournures vous paraissent maladroites.
En vous remerciant par avance,
Très bonne soirée à vous,
Rémi

January 13th, 2016,

Dear Madam, Sir,

Currently in third year of Medical studies in XXX in France, I am looking for a summer research internship in the field of Medicine for one month.
After obtaining two theorical course units in Immunopathology and Physiopathology of infections respectively, I have to do a work placement (practical course unit) to validate a Master 1.
During this internship, we have to participate to the laboratory main project by performing usual laboratory manipulations. Moreover, I have to write an internship report and present it during an oral exam.
Thus, dynamic, efficient and motivated, I would like to do this internship in one of your laboratories, whose the reputation is firmly established.
I have enclosed my CV for your consideration and I shall, of course, be delighted to give any additional information that you may require.
I look forward to discussing my candidacy with you further.
Kind regards,
XXXXXX

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Modifié par lucile83 le 12-01-2017 22:17

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Réponse : Lettre Motivation/Stage de gerondif, postée le 13-01-2017 à 12:00:57 (S | E)
Bonjour.
Enlevez la virgule devant whose et le the derrière .
Kind regards me semble un peu familier. Un plus classique irait mieux. Yours sincerely.....

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Réponse : Lettre Motivation/Stage de here4u, postée le 13-01-2017 à 14:21:08 (S | E)
Hello,

- to participate to the laboratory main project... - moi, je "participate in something .."
- laboratories, whose the reputation => whose + objet possédé sans déterminant !
- OK with gerondif : "kind regards" is too informal!

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Réponse : Lettre Motivation/Stage de lorr, postée le 14-01-2017 à 11:44:38 (S | E)
Merci beaucoup à vous deux, gérondif et here4u, pour le temps que vous y avez passé. Pensez vous que ma lettre est correcte et que je peux l'envoyer ? Ou est-ce encore trop maladroit dans les tournures ?

Dear Madam, Sir,
Currently in third year of Medical studies in XXX in France, I am looking for a summer research internship in the field of Medicine for one month.
After obtaining two theorical course units in Immunopathology and Physiopathology of infections respectively, I have to do a work placement (practical course unit) to validate a Master 1.
During this internship, we have to participate in the laboratory main project by performing usual laboratory manipulations.
Moreover, I have to write an internship report and present it during an oral exam.
Thus, dynamic, efficient and motivated, I would like to do this internship in one of your laboratory whose reputation is firmly established.

I have enclosed my CV for your consideration and I shall, of course, be delighted to give any additional information that you may require.
I look forward to discussing my candidacy with you further.

Yours sincerely,

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Réponse : Lettre Motivation/Stage de gerondif, postée le 14-01-2017 à 16:40:30 (S | E)
Bonjour,
Dear Madam, Sir,
Currently in my third year of Medical studies in XXX in France, I am looking for a summer research internship in the field of Medicine for one month.
After obtaining two theorical course units in Immunopathology and Physiopathology of infections respectively, I have to do a work placement (practical course unit) to validate a Master 1.
During this internship, we will have to participate in (take part in) the laboratory main project 'soit the main laboratory project, soit the laboratory's main project) by performing usual laboratory manipulations.
Moreover, I will have to write an internship report and present it during an oral exam.
Thus, dynamic, efficient and motivated, I would like to do this internship in one of your laboratories(in your laboratory) whose reputation is firmly established.

I have enclosed my CV for your consideration and I shall, of course, be delighted to give any additional information that you may require.
I look forward to discussing my candidacy with you further.

Yours sincerely,

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Réponse : Lettre Motivation/Stage de lorr, postée le 15-01-2017 à 19:59:55 (S | E)
Merci beaucoup pour vos corrections gérondif, je vais l'envoyer !
très bonne soirée à vous !

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