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Message de pom posté le 21-01-2017 à 17:54:58 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous,
je cherche quelqu'un qui aurait la gentillesse de corriger ce texte s'il vous plait.
Merci d'avance
To begin with, feminism was a movement very important at the beginning of the 20th (twentieth) century. In 1903 in Great Britain, Mrs Pankhurst create the organisation of the women social and political union. The movie “Suffragettes” watch us the life of suffragettes. We would see through this movie women didn’t have many rights. They worked at home or they had jobs not much important like to iron of laundry. During this period, the women provoked the government what it had nothing for them previously. For instance, the suffragettes organized demonstrations, to explode bombs, to smash,… They were violent and determined to have more rights. In the document “British women: Deeds not words”, we learn that at this violent period, many of women were arrested and incarcerated. The right to vote for women in England is granted them at the end of the First World War in 1918.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 21-01-2017 18:14
Message de pom posté le 21-01-2017 à 17:54:58 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous,
je cherche quelqu'un qui aurait la gentillesse de corriger ce texte s'il vous plait.
Merci d'avance
To begin with, feminism was a movement very important at the beginning of the 20th (twentieth) century. In 1903 in Great Britain, Mrs Pankhurst create the organisation of the women social and political union. The movie “Suffragettes” watch us the life of suffragettes. We would see through this movie women didn’t have many rights. They worked at home or they had jobs not much important like to iron of laundry. During this period, the women provoked the government what it had nothing for them previously. For instance, the suffragettes organized demonstrations, to explode bombs, to smash,… They were violent and determined to have more rights. In the document “British women: Deeds not words”, we learn that at this violent period, many of women were arrested and incarcerated. The right to vote for women in England is granted them at the end of the First World War in 1918.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 21-01-2017 18:14
Réponse : Correction/féminisme de laure95, postée le 22-01-2017 à 18:31:22 (S | E)
Bonsoir,
- feminism was a movement very important (pas à la bonne place)
- In 1903 in Great Britain, Mrs Pankhurst create (mettre au passé)
- the organisation of the women social and political union: ?
-The movie “Suffragettes” watch (faute de conjugaison)us the life of suffragettes.
- We would see through this movie (that)women didn’t have many rights.
- like to iron of laundry: like + verbe + -ing.
- what it had nothing for them previously: mal dit.
- For instance, the suffragettes organized demonstrations, to explode (conjuguer le verbe) bombs, to smash,(même remarque)…
- at this violent period: remplacer AT par DURING
- The right to vote for women in England is (passé)granted them at the end of the First World War in 1918.
Réponse : Correction/féminisme de leila4748, postée le 26-01-2017 à 06:25:58 (S | E)
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Modifié par lucile83 le 26-01-2017 08:02
il est préférable de seulement signaler les fautes, et d'apporter son aide plutôt que de faire le travail qui n'aura plus qu'à être recopié.
Correction toute faite effacée.
The members who ask for help should know where their mistakes are but do the work by themselves and correct their text, not copy a ready-made correction.
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