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Message de rainicorn posté le 24-06-2017 à 22:21:57 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
je voudrais avoir un rapide avis sur mon texte s'il vous plait.
Merci d'avance pour vos réponses !
I am going to talk about the notion of the Idea of Progress. First, I will give a definition of this notion. Progress is an evolution for the better, it is an improvement, an advancement in different domains, fields such as technologies, sciences, society, social issues, medicines, customs, freedoms (speech, movement). In class, we focused on the thematic of the « Swinging 60s » (between 1961 and 1973). This period after the two world war, which constitutes one terrible economic crisis and millions of Deaths. After this terrible event, people wanted to live again, hence the baby-boom. While the world was a giant battlefield, it needed to be rebuild, leading the full employment and financial security. In the 60s, the baby boomers are teenagers and their first preoccupation was to enjoy life and to have fun. They wanted more of life than just surviving. We can wonder if the 60s was really the « Golden age » and what legacy and progress they left? We shall consider this question through four different documents.
To begin, we are going to deal with the change and expectations of change during the 60s. Sometimes called « The Golden Age » the 60s was supposed to be the beginning of a new era. People were exhausted of war and conflicts, they wanted peace and tranquility. This thought is the basis of the hippie movement. People wanted to have leisure and to live as much (testing everything like drugs for example...). The first document we are going to talk about is the cover of Time Magazine, which is an American weekly with a broad international circulation, dated from April 1966. It is in this magazine that the world « swinging » was first associated to the 60s. At this time, London was the epicenter of the pop culture and modern change. The picture is divided into two parts diagonally : The Old Order and The New Order. On the right-hand side, there is the Old Order, represents with Big Ben, the double-decker Red Bus, the mention of tea which is the national beverage. In the foreground we can see rich old people from the conventional upper class. There is a representation of royalty, and the Establishment with the caricature of the Prime Minister Harold Wilson. This part of the image symbolizes the old conservative traditional England. The left-hand side represents the New World of the young. The renewal appears in different field, as music (the Who in the foreground), fashion with miniskirt, flannel trousers and long hair, or else fun places as Bingo Hall a discotheque, and even drugs (the blond girl). This new world is in bright psychedelic colors that make the elements stand out. The colors are a statement, youth leads the way and changes society and brings color to the world.
The change seems to be unstoppable and it takes more and more place in society. Times they are a changin' », a song by Bob Dylan, first recorded in 1963 included in the album of the same name. This folk song was very influential in its time, a kind of anthem to novelty. Bob Dylan said about this song « This was definitely a song with a purpose[...] I wanted to write a big song ». This song is composed of short verses in the imperative, there are many repetitions which create an incantatory effect. The first stanza is a reference to the Great Flood that he compares to the 60s in the way he asks people not just to accept change, but to embrace it, for if they don't they will be swept away by the wave of change, nobody can stop it. In the second stanza, he addresses intellectuals, and opinion makers and tells them not to speak too hastily not to judge prematurely because there is an up heaval coming. In the third stanza he calls the politicians, the people in power, and he demands that they listen to the people. He tells them not to resist change or they will be hurt. There is a revolution in the making and they must accept it. In the fourth stanza, he addresses parents, the parents of baby boomers. He doesn't necessarily ask them to understand but he urges them not to criticize their kids even if they don't understand or if they don't agree. He wants parents to support youth on its road to change or to give way. The last stanza serves as conclusion of all the stanzas, it means that the world is revolving, that the change is coming, and there is no going back, nothing can stop that.
Then, the 60's marked the emergence of the consumerism society. The purchasing power greatly increase during this decade. To illustrate this idea I'll deal with a corpus composed of a photography and a text. The image shows two young women who are window shopping mini dresses as was the fashion in the 60s, the photo is likely to have been taken in London. The article was published in 2002 and deals with cultural revolution of the 60s and the use of consumer society fulled by the welfare state. Indeed, it was a changing point. Young people wanted to change the world and as the article says tended in consummation. The world changes in the 60s, but the question is « with consumer society did it change for the better ? ».
To finish with, we are going to deal with the report of the 60s, which is for many people, really disappointed with regard to the expectations of the beginning. Moreover, the 60s were really far to be a decade of peace and happiness, there were the Cold War, the Vietnam war, the assassinations of John Fitzgerald and Martin Lutherking. The last document I am going to present is a song written by Bob Dylan in 1973, for the movie « Pat Garret or Billy the Kid » by Sam Peckinpah. This song how the future was uncertain, it is about the end of something. It can be interpreted in different ways for example in the 70s it can be a reference to the Vietnam War or to the end of the dreams of the 60s, the failure of counterculture. In this song there are two stanzas and a chorus. The protagonist is giving up the fight and wants to get rid of the symbol of his past he is in a state of confusion desperately trying to find a way out, but door want open. The second stanza in the same way shows the impossibility for the protagonist to act. It is too much for him. This song mirrors another one entitled « first one hope change second one is the end of illusion.
To conclude, is obviously and undoubtedly a period of change and innovation, in different fields, with for example the authorization of the pill included in an optic of woman emancipation, or the rise of the ready to wear industry, or still the musical revolution. The ancient world is start to fade in front of the colorful new one. But there are all the same some flies in the ointment. The consumerism society is for example one of the legacy which can be discussed, nowadays with insight, we can realize that it is vector of social and ecologic issues particularly. Moreover, we saw that the attempt of the people about the change was huge, yet the last document we saw, showed the end of the dream of the 60's and the disappointment face to a change expected, but that never showed, or at least not enough or not in the way they hoped.
On my mind, the 60's stay a symbol of freedom and change, and I think many people as me, only keep the light side of this decade, with it amazing music and movies, or the shimmering colors clothes.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 24-06-2017 22:31
Message de rainicorn posté le 24-06-2017 à 22:21:57 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
je voudrais avoir un rapide avis sur mon texte s'il vous plait.
Merci d'avance pour vos réponses !
I am going to talk about the notion of the Idea of Progress. First, I will give a definition of this notion. Progress is an evolution for the better, it is an improvement, an advancement in different domains, fields such as technologies, sciences, society, social issues, medicines, customs, freedoms (speech, movement). In class, we focused on the thematic of the « Swinging 60s » (between 1961 and 1973). This period after the two world war, which constitutes one terrible economic crisis and millions of Deaths. After this terrible event, people wanted to live again, hence the baby-boom. While the world was a giant battlefield, it needed to be rebuild, leading the full employment and financial security. In the 60s, the baby boomers are teenagers and their first preoccupation was to enjoy life and to have fun. They wanted more of life than just surviving. We can wonder if the 60s was really the « Golden age » and what legacy and progress they left? We shall consider this question through four different documents.
To begin, we are going to deal with the change and expectations of change during the 60s. Sometimes called « The Golden Age » the 60s was supposed to be the beginning of a new era. People were exhausted of war and conflicts, they wanted peace and tranquility. This thought is the basis of the hippie movement. People wanted to have leisure and to live as much (testing everything like drugs for example...). The first document we are going to talk about is the cover of Time Magazine, which is an American weekly with a broad international circulation, dated from April 1966. It is in this magazine that the world « swinging » was first associated to the 60s. At this time, London was the epicenter of the pop culture and modern change. The picture is divided into two parts diagonally : The Old Order and The New Order. On the right-hand side, there is the Old Order, represents with Big Ben, the double-decker Red Bus, the mention of tea which is the national beverage. In the foreground we can see rich old people from the conventional upper class. There is a representation of royalty, and the Establishment with the caricature of the Prime Minister Harold Wilson. This part of the image symbolizes the old conservative traditional England. The left-hand side represents the New World of the young. The renewal appears in different field, as music (the Who in the foreground), fashion with miniskirt, flannel trousers and long hair, or else fun places as Bingo Hall a discotheque, and even drugs (the blond girl). This new world is in bright psychedelic colors that make the elements stand out. The colors are a statement, youth leads the way and changes society and brings color to the world.
The change seems to be unstoppable and it takes more and more place in society. Times they are a changin' », a song by Bob Dylan, first recorded in 1963 included in the album of the same name. This folk song was very influential in its time, a kind of anthem to novelty. Bob Dylan said about this song « This was definitely a song with a purpose[...] I wanted to write a big song ». This song is composed of short verses in the imperative, there are many repetitions which create an incantatory effect. The first stanza is a reference to the Great Flood that he compares to the 60s in the way he asks people not just to accept change, but to embrace it, for if they don't they will be swept away by the wave of change, nobody can stop it. In the second stanza, he addresses intellectuals, and opinion makers and tells them not to speak too hastily not to judge prematurely because there is an up heaval coming. In the third stanza he calls the politicians, the people in power, and he demands that they listen to the people. He tells them not to resist change or they will be hurt. There is a revolution in the making and they must accept it. In the fourth stanza, he addresses parents, the parents of baby boomers. He doesn't necessarily ask them to understand but he urges them not to criticize their kids even if they don't understand or if they don't agree. He wants parents to support youth on its road to change or to give way. The last stanza serves as conclusion of all the stanzas, it means that the world is revolving, that the change is coming, and there is no going back, nothing can stop that.
Then, the 60's marked the emergence of the consumerism society. The purchasing power greatly increase during this decade. To illustrate this idea I'll deal with a corpus composed of a photography and a text. The image shows two young women who are window shopping mini dresses as was the fashion in the 60s, the photo is likely to have been taken in London. The article was published in 2002 and deals with cultural revolution of the 60s and the use of consumer society fulled by the welfare state. Indeed, it was a changing point. Young people wanted to change the world and as the article says tended in consummation. The world changes in the 60s, but the question is « with consumer society did it change for the better ? ».
To finish with, we are going to deal with the report of the 60s, which is for many people, really disappointed with regard to the expectations of the beginning. Moreover, the 60s were really far to be a decade of peace and happiness, there were the Cold War, the Vietnam war, the assassinations of John Fitzgerald and Martin Lutherking. The last document I am going to present is a song written by Bob Dylan in 1973, for the movie « Pat Garret or Billy the Kid » by Sam Peckinpah. This song how the future was uncertain, it is about the end of something. It can be interpreted in different ways for example in the 70s it can be a reference to the Vietnam War or to the end of the dreams of the 60s, the failure of counterculture. In this song there are two stanzas and a chorus. The protagonist is giving up the fight and wants to get rid of the symbol of his past he is in a state of confusion desperately trying to find a way out, but door want open. The second stanza in the same way shows the impossibility for the protagonist to act. It is too much for him. This song mirrors another one entitled « first one hope change second one is the end of illusion.
To conclude, is obviously and undoubtedly a period of change and innovation, in different fields, with for example the authorization of the pill included in an optic of woman emancipation, or the rise of the ready to wear industry, or still the musical revolution. The ancient world is start to fade in front of the colorful new one. But there are all the same some flies in the ointment. The consumerism society is for example one of the legacy which can be discussed, nowadays with insight, we can realize that it is vector of social and ecologic issues particularly. Moreover, we saw that the attempt of the people about the change was huge, yet the last document we saw, showed the end of the dream of the 60's and the disappointment face to a change expected, but that never showed, or at least not enough or not in the way they hoped.
On my mind, the 60's stay a symbol of freedom and change, and I think many people as me, only keep the light side of this decade, with it amazing music and movies, or the shimmering colors clothes.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 24-06-2017 22:31
Réponse : The 60's/ Golden Age de dsmith, postée le 28-06-2017 à 03:41:40 (S | E)
Bonjour,
technologies -> normally used in the singular.
sciences -> normally used in the singular.
thematic -> theme
two world war -> plural wars
rebuild -> rebuilt
leading the full...leading [preposition] full...
exhausted of...use a different preposition
to live as much... -> this doesn't make sense to live as much as possible? to live fully? to live as they wanted?
world swinging -> ?? word "swinging" ??
associated to -> use a different preposition
the pop culture -> remove the definite article
That is all I have time to review now.
Good luck!
Douglas
Réponse : The 60's/ Golden Age de here4u, postée le 28-06-2017 à 13:43:09 (S | E)
hello
!After dsmith's review, here's mine... I won't have enough time to read the whole text now... (If it's for your Bac, it's much too long and shouldn't be that written! -it's an oral exam...)
I am going to talk about the notion of the Idea of Progress. First, I will give a definition of this notion. Progress is an evolution for the better, it is an improvement, an advancement in different domains, fields such as technologies, sciences, society, social issues, medicines, customs, freedoms (F of speech, of movement). In class, we focused on the thematic of the « Swinging 60s » (between 1961 and 1973). This period after the two world war, which constitutes(very clumsy!) one terrible economic crisis and millions of Deaths. After this terrible event, people wanted to live again, hence the baby-boom. While the world was a giant battlefield, it needed to be rebuild,(
past participle here!) leading the full employment and financial security. In the 60s, the baby boomers are teenagers and their first preoccupation was to enjoy life and to have fun. They wanted more of life than just surviving. We can wonder if the 60s was really the « Golden age » and what legacy and progress they left? We shall consider this question through four different documents.To begin, we are going to deal with the change and the expectations of change during the 60s. Sometimes called « The Golden Age » the 60s was supposed to be the beginning of a new era. People were exhausted of war and conflicts= clumsy!, they wanted peace and tranquility. This thought is the basis of the hippie movement. People wanted to have leisure and to live as much
(testing everything like drugs for example...). The first document we are going to talk about is the cover of Time Magazine, which is an American weekly with a broad international circulation, dated from April 1966. It is in this magazine that the world « swinging » was first associated to the 60s. At this time, London was the epicenter of the pop culture and modern change. The picture is divided into two parts diagonally : The Old Order and The New Order. On the right-hand side, there is the Old Order, represents(representing? /picturing? (with)Big Ben, the double-decker Red Bus, the mention of tea which is the national beverage (in Britain). In the foreground we can see rich old people from the conventional upper class. There is a representation of royalty, and the Establishment with the caricature of the Prime Minister Harold Wilson. This part of the image symbolizes the old conservative traditional England. The left-hand side represents the New World of the young (in the 60s, you mean!). The renewal appears in different field, as music (the Who in the foreground), fashion with miniskirt, flannel trousers and long hair, or else fun places as Bingo HallS, a discotheque, and even drugs (the blond girl). This new world is in bright psychedelic colors that make the elements stand out. The colors are a statement, youth leads the way and, changes society and brings color to the world.The change seems to be unstoppable and it takes more and more place in society. "Times they are a changin' », a song by Bob Dylan, first recorded in 1963 included in the album of the same name.(this isn't a sentence!) This folk song was very influential in its time, a kind of anthem to novelty. Bob Dylan said about this song « This was definitely a song with a purpose[...] I wanted to write a big song ». This song is composed of short verses in the imperative, there are many repetitions which create an incantatory effect. (I would have used the past simple all along the "explanation" of the song!)The first stanza is a reference to the Great Flood that he compares to the 60s in the way he asks people not just to accept change, but to embrace it, for if they don't, they will be swept away by the wave of change, nobody can stop it. In the second stanza, he addresses intellectuals, and opinion makers and tells them not to speak too hastily not to judge prematurely because there is an up heaval coming. In the third stanza he calls ?(addressed?) the politicians, the people in power, and he demands that they listen to the people. He tells them not to resist change or they will be hurt. There is a revolution in the making and they must accept it. In the fourth stanza, he addresses parents, the parents of baby boomers. He doesn't necessarily ask them to understand but he urges them not to criticize their kids even if they don't understand them or if they don't agree (with ....). He wants parents to support youth on its road to change or to give way. The last stanza serves as a conclusion of all the stanzas, it means that the world is revolving, that the change is coming, and there is no going back, nothing can stop that.
Sorry! I have to stop for now!
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